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I illustrate all my sex scenes by comparing it to noises you make when eating various foods (mostly lunch meat)
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Feb 27, 2017 23:25
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Smash it Smash hit posted:I illustrate all my sex scenes by comparing it to noises you make when eating various foods (mostly lunch meat) Sounds good!
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Feb 27, 2017 23:31
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I'm eating a great american waffle
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Feb 27, 2017 23:36
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Smash it Smash hit posted:i dont think there are even that many words! Lol or did you repeat some? My novel doesnt use any word more than once. Sounds like your novel will be a lot better than mine!
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Feb 27, 2017 23:41
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Wanted to offer some suggestions for a scenarios you could build off of. Have a few chapters where you fall into a well. Maybe try to work in a part where you have to win a go-cart race so you can get your father the heart transplant he needs to survive. You come in 7th place and he dies but you learn and grow from the experience. Toss in a few Vietnam stories. Of course include lots of super descriptive graphic rough sex and I think you could have a modern classic on your hands. You want lots of graphic sex so you can cash in on the 50 shades of grey crowd. Good luck!
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Feb 27, 2017 23:43
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Jolo posted:OP, best of luck on your novel. I have one suggestion, you're free to use if you like it. (Note: I am an American so this suggestion could tip your novel a bit more America on the scales) Or he could just take the Pacione approach, i.e. that the sex "Cannot Be Described In the Sense That It Was Or is Horrifically Indescribable” <-- actual Nicky Pacione writing
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Feb 27, 2017 23:48
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'phwoar' she wailed as he ate her gooch like a sandwich. 'nom nom nom' he blurted in reply. YOU GOT MEAT FOR DAYS GIRL this is the first line of my book but im stuck now
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Feb 28, 2017 14:26
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RideTheSpiral posted:'phwoar' she wailed as he ate her gooch like a sandwich. 'nom nom nom' he blurted in reply. YOU GOT MEAT FOR DAYS GIRL Maybe the guy is a vampire? Dunno
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Feb 28, 2017 17:58
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RideTheSpiral posted:'phwoar' she wailed as he ate her gooch like a sandwich. 'nom nom nom' he blurted in reply. YOU GOT MEAT FOR DAYS GIRL Maybe something like: His munching sounds intensified as he noshed on her wet snatch. She wailed and begged for more, so he kicked his tongue into high gear and *really* went to town! "Fasten your seatbelts!" he said as he began spinning his tongue around inside her like a propeller.
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Feb 28, 2017 18:39
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You didn't use and food noise mentions so idk
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Feb 28, 2017 19:05
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i sidled up to a buxom blonde at the bar. 'ever seen one of these?' I said with a smirk pulling my girthy knöckenwurst out of my trouser. 'yikes' she bellowed, eyes popping out of her dumb skull and i ploughed her right there at the bar
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Feb 28, 2017 19:37
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