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• Might of the Brute is overpowered, full stop. It's great for flavour, increasing your maximum stats for Strength and Constitution at level 8, 16 and 20 all by two to a maximum of 26, but on top of that you also give two free stat boosts at each of those levels. Especially when you consider you, as a Brute, derive your attack and damage bonus from Strength, extra hit points from Constitution, and defense from both. Not even the Barbarian comes close to getting anything like Might of the Brute - Primal Champion only gives +4 Strength and sets the maximum to 24 at level 20. You give the Brute +6 to both Strength and Constitution across the leveling progression of the class. I'd say, keep the maximum stat increases, as they're unique and provide a neat way of focus and power. Nix the free stat boosts. Consider a level 20 stat boost in line with the Barbarian's +4 to Strength: maybe +4 divided as you wish between Strength and Constitution in increments of +4/+0, +3/+1 and +2/+2 ?
  
• I like how you used 2d4 as the class' hit dice, rather than a singular hit die. It's a little more beefy than d8, providing a little higher average than d8. It's a very neat choice. However, this brings up a unique problem for the class: do you recover hit points in singular d4 increments with a nice, big pool of d4's? Or do you recover health in increments of 2d4? Hit point recovery via resting and using hit dice, after all, assumes (roll + CON MOD), and with singular d4's, that extra healing adds up quickly. This is a unique problem only this class has, and you may want to consider outlining a ruling.
  
• On that same note,
  

  Brute Class design doc posted:

  Hit Points at 1st Level: 8 + 2x your Constitution modifier
  Hit Points at Higher Levels: 2d4 (or 6) + 2x your Constitution modifier per Brute level after 1st

  2x CON mod bonus on HP? Hard pass. The extra HP will add up very quickly across every level, especially when you consider the extra utility the Brute gets out of that Constitution. No martial class comes close to this level of ablative armour. You may want to tone the hit point gain down to just 2d4 + Constitution modifier.
  
• Your choice of stats for Unarmoured Defense is solid. A bit of a hyper focus, but it fits the theme. I love it. Barbarian's may scoff at this, however. Shame you can't Captain America it up with a shield, though, since Shield Master explicitly says 'wield a shield,' thus running counter to Unarmoured Defense.
  
• I like Mighty Leap. A lot. You might want to include an example of legal movement when you stride your full 20, 30 feet across land and then jump at the end of the movement. Where do you end up? At least it's a neat way to get around without resorting to just Movement Improvement. Also consider linking to FexLab's 5e Jump tool that DKWildz found, or refer to the jumping and distance rules with page numbers in your final draft.
  
• Brutish Durability has amazing flavour. Hell, if you roll 20 or above, you can count the roll as a natural 20! That's great! However, it is now also a better and always-on Bardic Inspiration on saves and death saving throws. Paladins have a similar feature in their Aura of Courage, but only when conscious, and scaling from their Charisma. Perhaps scale the die down to d4 (to fit your use of d4's for hit points and damage dice), and/or have it apply only to your death saving throws. You will be getting Monk-like proficiency in all saving throws, after all, come level 14 via Unstoppable.
  
• Editing niggles:
  • Decapitalize your use of 'Brute' throughout the text to 'brute' to better fit in line with other class write-ups in the various books.
    
  • Maybe rename Crushing Fists to Overpower? After all, your class feature extends to your improvised weapons, too, and not just your meaty paws.
    

• Your archetypes have an interesting feel to them. Rather than grant one or two features wholesale per tier/level that you gain archetype powers into, you seem to settle on 'give one feature, then add another and improve the first,' and so on. This may be a bit too powerful. Compare the archetypes of other classes, for instance. They usually have their scaling abilities from their base class, while the extra flavour and mechanics (that do not tend to scale) tend to come from their archetype. I am not sure how much you'd need to revise or otherwise rewrite, so that's all up to you, but I'm leaning towards the archetypes generally being more powerful than other martial classes' archetypes in general. This may definitely need revising.
  
• Strength of the Mountain:
  • This is absolutely my favourite archetype, but I feel it is a bit leaning towards being too powerful. Especially compared to other martial classes' abilities and their capacity to deal damage to multiple targets.
    
  • The rest of the features' names are outstanding and thematic. Definitely keep them, but check for formatting and referencing names and features.
    
  • Consider renaming Roots of the Mountain? instead to the base feature of the archetype, your ability to strike multiple foes at once and which improves only more and more as you level in the archetype: Avalanche Blow.
• Strength of the Elements seems weak compared to Strength of the Mountain.
  • Under Blaze of the Elements, under what conditions do you shed light? Is it always on? Only when you have your weapons charged with energy? How long does the charge last?
    
  • The archetype's features are also very flame-centric in name. Maybe shorter names, rather than 'of the's. Consider Elemental Spark, Elemental Ignition, Elemental Torrent and Elemental Typhoon for that touch of 'every element gets referenced' perhaps?
    
  • Gaining multiple movement modes that are always on is very powerful. It's great, sure, and this may have been intentional in your design. Not even other martials can approach this kind of delightful craziness, on top of the existing increased mobility via Mighty Leap. Even Sorcerors are limited in this capacity. Consider it being limited to your use of charged energy, or use a ki point-like mechanic? Or look at the Oath of Vengeance Paladin's Avenging Angel feature, where such a change is limited to only one hour per long rest, after using an action.
• Strength of the Sun suffers a little under some weak names and some other issues.
  You have a powerful 'all damage is radiant damage' from Strength of the Candle Light that doesn't seem to fit or be in line with how elemental damage is dealt with the abilities gained from Strength of the Elements. Doubly so if something comes up that is radiant-immune. Might want to tweak that.
  
  • Praise the Bonfire Light suffers from a little lack of clarity on the healing it grants.
    

    Brute Class design doc posted:

    Healing energy radiates from you. For 1 minute per Short Rest you can use a bonus action to cause one creature in your aura, including you, to regain 2d6 hit points.

    This may require some reformatting. Correct me if I mistake the intent of the ability, as that'll be up to you, anyway. The final editing, I mean.
    

    quote:

    Healing energy radiates from you. As a bonus action, you may grant one creature in your aura, including yourself, the ability to regain 2d6 hit points per turn for ten turns. These turns do not need to be subsequent, and you may freely shut down this ability. You regain the full use of this ability when you finish a long rest.

  • Praise the Bonfire Light grants a whole slew of advantages to saving throws. Praise the Sun gives a whole slew of always-on immunities. Thematic, yes, but perhaps a bit too much. Most classes do not get easy access immunities (outside of loving spells ), and those classes that do get immunities to special effects and damage types tend to only get one or two of them from their class or archetype features. You may want to consider tweaking this to be less all-inclusive, or perhaps that you can choose which among the many immunities you will choose as your light burns away at these impurities. Perhaps allow the Brute of the Sun to change these immunities on the onset of every sunrise/after a long rest for a little versatility. Personally, I'd say go for immunity to being blinded and resistance to necrotic damage.
    
  • Consider renaming the archetype features, they're a bit weak at the moment. Nurture the Sun's Light (you start having Sun's Light features), Guide by the Sun's Warmth (you start having an aura), Lead by the Sun's Grace (you can heal), Praise the Sun (because of course) or Champion of the Sun
    
  • Editing niggles: you make references to various levels of light (Bright Light, Dim Light, Magical Darkness). You may want to decapitalize them, as capitalization should only be used for spells by the same name (Light, Darkness).