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The vampire children described at the beginning that gently caress people up and are totally illegal are human infants/toddlers that get vamped. A vampire has never impregnated a human before because it's super dumb. Also tl;dr for the chapter: Bella drops her sippy cup and goes to pick it up because she's just a selfless idiot like that. Carlisle isn't back, Bella tears something inside herself and the baby freaks out because it can't breathe. Cue Bella being torn apart from the inside and having every bone in her body visibly shattered. She gets some relief from the pain when the baby snaps her spine, paralysing her. All this time Jacob is thinking about how much he hates the baby, giving Bella CPR, talking about how he hates the baby, giving Edward poo poo, talking about how he hates the baby, repeat ad nauseam. Edward gets the baby out with vampire teeth, gives it to Bella and it immediately bites her and she dies. Rosalie takes it off downstairs while Jacob thinks how much he hates it and Edward injects his venom into her and proceeds to start licking her like a giant popsicle. Jacob goes downstairs because the pull of Bella's love isn't there, since she's dead obviously, instead it's downstairs. Obviously outside. When he gets down though there's an intense pull towards the baby, obviously because he hates it. Then he sees it and the most poorly telegraphed twist in the series happens.
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MrNemo posted:The vampire children described at the beginning that gently caress people up and are totally illegal are human infants/toddlers that get vamped. A vampire has never impregnated a human before because it's super dumb.
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Shwoo posted:Not them, the legendary South American demon babies Edward and Rosalie told Jacob about earlier. That scene isn't as clear about their existence as I thought, though. Ah good point. I think they don't exist in the same way colonists discovered the Americas, Terra nullius and all that.
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MrNemo posted:Ah good point. I think they don't exist in the same way colonists discovered the Americas, Terra nullius and all that. The human-vampire hybrids get touched on more later, and it's important to the climax (if you can call it that, since it all builds up to nothing).
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The only thing I remember about The Host is Melanie is described in the very first or second chapter as raiding an abandoned human settlement for food and taking the heaviest, most nonsensical items for what is supposedly someone on the run. Including milk. Not powdered milk, not some weird future alien milk, just “milk.”
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I've heard The Host is actually fairly good compared to Twilight with some interesting stuff in there, although I've also heard the main reason it's less racist is because every single character is either white or a parasitic space alien.
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I just couldn’t get past the dullness. Her writing style is virtually unchanged, so it becomes hard after a few chapters to even care about continuing. Nothing pops or interests me.
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Jun 6, 2020 19:59
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I guess we're supposed to assume the baby bit Bella to kickstart her vampire transformation out of love, because that makes a lot less sense than it just being a fanged bundle of instinct that will rip the jugular out of any human that tries to hold it.
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"Renesmee loves Bella! That's why she understands she's hurting her and--wait no now she's trying to bite her and drink her blood as soon as she's born."
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Jun 7, 2020 17:36
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At the end of The Host, the alien gets transferred to a new body, and it's specifically mentioned how tiny and childike the new body is, and how big the love interest is by comparison. This is made a really big deal.
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HopperUK posted:At the end of The Host, the alien gets transferred to a new body, and it's specifically mentioned how tiny and childike the new body is, and how big the love interest is by comparison. This is made a really big deal. And Jacob is 6'7 and Edward is 6'2, while Stephenie Meyer (and coincidentally Bella!) is 5'4. I'm starting to think Meyer's entire oeuvre is just Mormon fetishes.
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The first takedown of Twilight I ever read was the “Sparkledammerung” published on LiveJournal back in 2008. Written by author Laura Stone, she was an ex-Mormon who noted the way Edward was described in the books felt oddly similar to how Joseph Smith was talked up when she was a kid, and came off like Meyer low-key wanted to smooch the founder of Mormonism.
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 quote:Personal affection is a luxury you can have only after all your enemies are eliminated. Until then, everyone you love is a hostage, sapping your courage and corrupting your judgment. Preface quote:No longer just a nightmare, the line of black advanced on us through the icy mist stirred up by their feet. Just like every "preface", I'm sure this one will actually be how things play out. Chapter 19: Burning quote:The pain was bewildering. Oh, she's reading this too? quote:Exactly that—I was bewildered. I couldn’t understand, couldn’t make sense of what was happening. One thing nobody had ever once hinted at being a possibility! I could never have seen this coming! Wait, what do you mean my pelvis broke earlier today? quote:I’d watched as my cup tilted, dark blood spilling out and staining the perfect white, and I’d lurched toward the accident reflexively. I’d seen the other, faster hands, but my body had continued to reach, to stretch.… Meyer, please, we already read this. You don't need to do it again. quote:Something sharper than knives ripped through me—the words, making sense in spite of the other tortures. Detached placenta—I knew what that meant. It meant that my baby was dying inside me. Please, we already know what happened. Don't make us read it a second time. Just continue the story. quote:Jacob? Jacob, still here, still trying to save me. I knew Meyer would keep dragging this book out, but I didn't think she would go so far as to start repeating chapters from other POVs. quote:The light danced, shattering off Edward’s crystal hands. The sparkles were tinged with red, with the blood that covered his skin. And more red in his hands. Something small and struggling, dripping with blood. He touched the warm body to my weak arms, almost like I was holding her. Her wet skin was hot—as hot as Jacob’s. Yeah, most babies look like hairless monkeys. quote:“Renesmee,” I whispered. “So… beautiful.”  quote:She leaned her head down, against my chest, burrowing against the warmth. Her skin was warm and silky, but it didn’t give the way mine did. Imagine if this turned out to be a canon confirmation of no afterlife existing in the Twilight universe and Edward was getting hyped up about his soul for nothing. quote:Edward. Edward. My life and his were twisted into a single strand. Cut one, and you cut both. If he were gone, I would not be able to live through that. If I were gone, he wouldn’t live through it, either. And a world without Edward seemed completely pointless. Edward had to exist. Let's be real, what Jacob has done is probably way worse than what you've done in this relationship. quote:But it was so dark here that I couldn’t see either of their faces. Nothing seemed real. That made it hard not to give up. But you could have had some kind of strength, had the author merely written some for you. quote:It had been enough up to this point. It would have to be enough today. I would endure this until help came. That just highlights how bad of a name it is! quote:And then, though I still couldn’t see anything, suddenly I could feel something. Like phantom limbs, I imagined I could feel my arms again. And in them, something small and hard and very, very warm. But...you didn't do anything. You just survived a few broken ribs and a broken pelvis and then died immediately afterward. quote:That spot of heat in my phantom arms felt so real. I clutched it closer. It was exactly where my heart should be. Holding tight the warm memory of my daughter, I knew that I would be able to fight the darkness as long as I needed to. This reminds me of how in Eclipse Bella's sacrifice of herself in the final battle turns out to be worthless and interfering with Edward and Seth's plans, and I got mad at how Meyer had to take the one time she could actually do something meaningful and rip it away from her just to keep her helpless. This seems to be doing the same thing. Thought you survived through perseverance and strength of will? Nah, that's just the vampire venom. You were dead otherwise. quote:Like grabbing the wrong end of a curling iron—my automatic response was to drop the scorching thing in my arms. But there was nothing in my arms. My arms were not curled to my chest. My arms were dead things lying somewhere at my side. The heat was inside me. I never thought a description of agony like this could feel so lifeless, yet here we are. quote:I realized it wasn’t the darkness holding me down; it was my body. So heavy. Burying me in the flames that were chewing their way out from my heart now, spreading with impossible pain through my shoulders and stomach, scalding their way up my throat, licking at my face. So even when she was actively dying, she was still trying to manipulate the events ahead of time to ensure she'd get her coveted immortality? quote:I hadn’t guessed that the morphine would have this effect—that it would pin me down and gag me. Hold me paralyzed while I burned. "Please, just end this book! Let us move on to other things!" quote:And, for a never-ending space, that was all there was. Just the fiery torture, and my soundless shrieks, pleading for death to come. Nothing else, not even time. So that made it infinite, with no beginning and no end. One infinite moment of pain.
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This is looking suspiciously like Bella getting some level of comeuppance for her quest for immortality and might actually wind up regretting it. So obviously that's not going to happen. Seriously though, I had a bad habit of skipping chapters I deemed extraneous when I was a teenager and were I in Twilight's target demographic at the time I'd have probably skipped most of the book at this point.
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Grammarchist posted:This is looking suspiciously like Bella getting some level of comeuppance for her quest for immortality and might actually wind up regretting it. So obviously that's not going to happen. At least the more superfluous chapters have some vague purpose in either slowly pushing the narrative forward or trying to further establish characterization. Fully 1/3 to 1/2 of this chapter is just recounting the previous one.
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Everything about Bella in this book has pissed me off. We like martyred characters in fiction not because they martyred themselves, but because of who they were beforehand. We don't care about Johnny because he told Ponyboy to stay golden on his deathbed, we care about him because even though he's a murderer, he's the kind of person to risk his life to save children from a fire. We care about Sydney Carton because his entire arc is about redeeming himself, and he's come far enough that he's willing to give his life for his rival. Hell, if you want to go the Biblical route, the whole point of the story of Jesus' crucifixion is that he could have run away or fought back, but he didn't because that would betray the things he'd taught. Instead, Meyer treats this like an entry in a Christian martyrology. Saint Agnes: Martyred for refusing to give up her virginity. Saint Lucy: Martyred for giving her riches to the poor. Saint Bella: Martyred for keeping her child even when it threatened her life.
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Wikipedia says this came out in 2008 and If I remember correctly that means it would have been written while the "culture of life" stuff was in the national conversation of the USA.
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hyperhazard posted:Everything about Bella in this book has pissed me off. We like martyred characters in fiction not because they martyred themselves, but because of who they were beforehand. We don't care about Johnny because he told Ponyboy to stay golden on his deathbed, we care about him because even though he's a murderer, he's the kind of person to risk his life to save children from a fire. We care about Sydney Carton because his entire arc is about redeeming himself, and he's come far enough that he's willing to give his life for his rival. Hell, if you want to go the Biblical route, the whole point of the story of Jesus' crucifixion is that he could have run away or fought back, but he didn't because that would betray the things he'd taught. And it's not even really a "martyrdom" because she's been arranging everything for over a year to end with her being revived through vampirism anyway. Considerations of who she could be harming or what she could be sacrificing come and go within a paragraph or two, and the book comes pretty close to implying that it's a worthy sacrifice for her True Love anyway.
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chitoryu12 posted:And it's not even really a "martyrdom" because she's been arranging everything for over a year to end with her being revived through vampirism anyway. Considerations of who she could be harming or what she could be sacrificing come and go within a paragraph or two, and the book comes pretty close to implying that it's a worthy sacrifice for her True Love anyway. She's also specifically sacrificing everything, even risking her own life, for the sake of her baby despite everyone telling her it's dangerous and/or just a terrible idea. This is a very Mormon thing, a woman's highest purpose and spiritual calling is motherhood.
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I keep referring back to das_sporking but among their counts was “Hail the Mother Goddess” for every time the concept of motherhood was held high and lofty even when the character or reason behind it was far less so. The third part of this book is where that count really ramps up.
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SUPERMAN'S GAL PAL posted:I keep referring back to das_sporking but among their counts was “Hail the Mother Goddess” for every time the concept of motherhood was held high and lofty even when the character or reason behind it was far less so. The third part of this book is where that count really ramps up. That really is a great sporking of the series. The only reason I haven't read more of it is that the writing style of the bloggers is really aggravating at times, especially when they suddenly switch to having Sam and Dean Winchester do the sporking???
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chitoryu12 posted:And it's not even really a "martyrdom" because she's been arranging everything for over a year to end with her being revived through vampirism anyway. Considerations of who she could be harming or what she could be sacrificing come and go within a paragraph or two, and the book comes pretty close to implying that it's a worthy sacrifice for her True Love anyway.
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Yeah, it’s a dated style choice ala MST3K that I saw more of in the early-mid aughts. You’d have a terrible Harry Potter story, for example, and you’d use the characters as a way to sit down and riff on it. While it clearly falls under parody, people being pissy over this is what got MST3Ks and other parodies banned from FF dot net many years ago, causing a shift to LJ where communities could be behind a sign-up. I also think working through other characters was a way to mix up the boredom of what a slog so much of this series is as well as just for fun since the riffers had written their own fanfic for other series for years.
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hyperhazard posted:I'd be interested to know whether Meyer is using vampirism as an intentional metaphor for heaven (not a sentence I ever expected to write) or if it just came out subconsciously. For all intents and purposes, Bella's human body is dead and gone. Now she's an athletic, beautiful, superhuman being that gets to live forever with her soulmate. Thanks to his family's riches, they get a free house, expensive cars, luxury islands, and everything material they might need. Hell, they even get free childcare from their I think Sparkledammerung interpreted it as conversion to Mormonism, with the Cullens representing the ideal Mormon family and the human-killing vampires and the Quileute as the other tribes who will hurt you or pull you away from your destiny.
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Jun 8, 2020 21:40
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Imagine if smeyer knew that many brunettes are born blonde.
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quote:It could have been seconds or days, weeks or years, but, eventually, time came to mean something again. Mood. quote:Three things happened together, grew from each other so that I didn’t know which came first: time restarted, the morphine’s weight faded, and I got stronger. Okay, now you're just recycling the "I ran through three facts" thing. quote:I could feel the control of my body come back to me in increments, and those increments were my first markers of the time passing. I knew it when I was able to twitch my toes and twist my fingers into fists. I knew it, but I did not act on it. Bella suddenly remembering everything is meaningless when she did the entire last part of this chapter with perfect clarity. There's not a emotional change from what we've already experienced. quote:This happened just in time for me to hold on when the weights left my body. To anyone watching me, there would be no change. But for me, as I struggled to keep the screams and thrashing locked up inside my body, where they couldn’t hurt anyone else, it felt like I’d gone from being tied to the stake as I burned, to gripping that stake to hold myself in the fire. Remember when previously Carlisle was the only vampire we knew to resist the urge to make a noise as he transformed, and now Bella likewise displays an impossible tolerance for pain and an inner strength that she's never had before? quote:I continued to get stronger, my thoughts clearer. When new noises came, I could listen. Okay, that's actually more control than Carlisle. She's so still that she seems dead! The only explanation I can think of for this is that she's so used to her constant injuries that she no longer expresses pain. quote:My resolve wavered for a second. "I'm glad we chose her as the protagonist! She's somehow better than all of us in every way!" quote:Yes, I was right to keep quiet. Carlisle would reassure him. He didn’t need to suffer with me. Oof, I hope she tells them when she wakes up before they get this idea with the next vampire. quote:Faint pressure inside the crease of my elbow. Another whisper. “Bella, I love you. Bella, I’m sorry.” Not while the author still wants to have scenes with other people with a strict first-person viewpoint! How many times in this series now has Bella just pretended to be asleep or dead or whatever to eavesdrop for 10 minutes on other conversations? quote:Through all this, the racking fire went right on burning me. But there was so much space in my head now. Room to ponder their conversation, room to remember what had happened, room to look ahead to the future, with still endless room left over to suffer in. I'm sure there's some drama about it and it's not a big nothingburger! quote:“No, I’m staying right here,” Edward whispered, answering an unspoken thought. “They’ll sort it out.” If this foreshadowing were more hamfisted, it would be Iberian. quote:I went back to counting Edward’s breaths to mark the time. Why yes, the rest of this chapter will be just people walking in and out of a room and talking! quote:“Still feeling a little bitter?” There's your canon explanation for why Alice can't see the future of werewolves or Renesmee. This conveniently makes the family's clairvoyant absolutely useless in any conflict that isn't with vampires or humans. Fortunately, Meyer has zero creativity and no other creatures are going to appear in this series! quote:“Focus, Alice.” No teenager in 1917 spoke like this. quote:“I couldn’t see right two days ago. But now that she’s free of all the blind spots, it’s a piece of cake.” Have a Snickers, man. quote:Alice snorted. “You know what I mean. Look at her.” https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nATapY005XY The movie plays up the body horror even more by making Bella so drained by Renesmee that she's basically a skeleton when she dies. quote:I heard Alice breeze out of the room. I heard the swish of the fabric she moved, rubbing against itself. I heard the quiet buzz of the light hanging from the ceiling. I heard the faint wind brushing against the outside of the house. I could hear everything. I see Rosalie is as normal as ever. quote:I listened for more, but there was nothing but the game. Baseball was not interesting enough to distract me from the pain, so I listened to Edward’s breathing again, counting the seconds. I was not expecting this series to dunk on baseball so hard after the first book. quote:Twenty-one thousand, nine hundred seventeen and a half seconds later, the pain changed. How do vampires manage to clearly focus on exactly what sounds they need to hear without any sensory overload? The answer may surprise you! quote:The fire retreated from my palms, leaving them blissfully pain-free and cool. But it retreated to my heart, which blazed hot as the sun and beat at a furious new speed. Unfortunately, the book is not almost over. We're 48% to the end. quote:My wrists were free, though, and my ankles. The fire was totally extinguished there. It would at least make this interesting. quote:“I’ll bring them right up,” Alice said, an urgent edge to her tone, and I heard the swish of wind as she darted away. That would look really funny in practice. quote:It became a battle inside me—my sprinting heart racing against the attacking fire. Both were losing. The fire was doomed, having consumed everything that was combustible; my heart galloped toward its last beat. And there you have it: the world's most boring vampire transformation. quote:There was no sound. No breathing. Not even mine.
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The good thing about the fact that we are only 48% through the book is that from here on things happen. More things happen than have happened in the rest of the series, at least as far as my recollection goes.
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I'm sure it'll be just as boring as everything else Meyer intends to be interesting.
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If you watched the movies but haven't read the book, prepare to be disappointed. The studio must have realized towards the end that the series needed some sort of dramatic climax, so the last movie just starts adding stuff, including an entire 20 minute battle sequence. It's probably the most watchable of the movies, and it includes Bella beating the poo poo out mountain lions, other vampires, and Jake.
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Speaking of movies, we are finally in the second Breaking Dawn film as this next chapter begins. They got an almost perfect 50/50 split in the book after cutting insane amounts of extraneous material.
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Like, the past two chapters could have just been half a chapter, at most. Bella saw her daughter briefly, now her blood's on fire, the morphine just paralyses her, she starts feeling a little better but doesn't want to upset her loved ones by letting them know she's conscious, and then the venom reaches her heart and vampirises her. It did not need to be that drawn out. Also, her narration was very lucid considering her blood was on fire.
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Yeah it’s great how she has such perfect self control not to cry out at all and I bet she skips the year of feral bloodlust we were promised all new vampires experience because she’s just so special too.
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So special that she avoids going ballistic the moment she hears ‘keep the baby away.’ Bella supposedly wants this baby even more than vampirism. For her to resist exploding into a brief violent rage feels out of character!
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Chapter 20: Newquote:Everything was so clear. Octarine? Also, that would be awful. If she was actually capable of seeing ultraviolet or infrared clearly like this implies, and is seeing all light as a rainbow, her vision should be horrendously blurry, like she's looking through a prism. quote:Behind the light, I could distinguish the individual grains in the dark wood ceiling above. In front of it, I could see the dust motes in the air, the sides the light touched, and the dark sides, distinct and separate. They spun like little planets, moving around each other in a celestial dance. If you want to read a more realistic take on how this would all go, I recommend The Hellbound Heart by Clive Barker. That person actually doesn't like the taste of dust! quote:The TV downstairs had been muted, and I heard someone—Rosalie?—shift her weight on the first floor. So there's your answer to the question of how vampires deal with sensory overload: they don't. They can just detect what they're supposed to at all times without really any difficulty, despite being able to hear noises from miles away. They just get all the required secondary powers flawlessly at birth! quote:I didn’t realize someone was holding my hand until whoever it was squeezed it lightly. Like it had before to hide the pain, my body locked down again in surprise. This was not a touch I expected. The skin was perfectly smooth, but it was the wrong temperature. Not cold. Oh yeah, there's no more cold, marble-hard vampires! They feel completely normal to one another! quote:After that first frozen second of shock, my body responded to the unfamiliar touch in a way that shocked me even more. Twilight vampires also have extremely good internal chronometers, it seems. quote:Edward was leaning across the operating table that had been my pyre, his hand reached out toward me, his expression anxious. Silly Cullens, don't they know this is Bella Swan they're talking about? Of course she'll be the most flawless vampire in existence! quote:All this was a sideline. The greater part of my senses and my mind were still focused on Edward’s face. You've got that right. quote:At this point, the other part of my attention had ascertained that there was no danger here besides myself, and I automatically straightened out of my crouch; almost a whole second had passed since I’d been on the table. This is why vampire conversations that they don't care about being heard by humans are impossible to understand. They can talk at hyper speed in addition to moving. quote:I watched the grace of his advance, absorbing it with my new eyes. Yep, that's Joseph Smith there. quote:“Bella, love? I’m sorry, I know it’s disorienting. But you’re all right. Everything is fine.” You say this as if Meyer would dare to have anyone be seriously harmed or provide real stakes to this story. quote:As I deliberated for one small piece of a second over which question to ask first, Edward reached out tentatively and stroked his fingertips across my cheek. Smooth as satin, soft as a feather, and now exactly matched to the temperature of my skin. It's like Meyer wants to piss off anyone who was expecting consequences for any action. All the buildup about Bella having to give up anything at all to be a vampire? Gone. It was meaningless. All the effort you spent reading about it was worth nothing in your life. quote:He arched one perfect eyebrow, waiting for me to speak. This chapter is where Das Sporking puts in their "Godmode Sue" count. Bella is going to be obnoxiously perfect. quote:He smiled the kind of smile that would have stopped my heart if it were still beating. Finally, she can get him back for all the abuse! quote:His hand stroked my cheek again, and I all but forgot my distress as another wave of desire rippled through my motionless body. So I actually went back and found where Edward said that. It was when he was dumping her at the beginning of New Moon and trying to justify it by saying he'd eventually forget about her. quote:I made a concerted effort to focus. There was something I needed to say. The most important thing. That's the most important thing you needed to say? quote:His answering smile dazzled me more than it ever had when I was human; I could really see it now. Because why should Stephenie Meyer have to inconvenience her wish fulfillment self-insert? quote:Though I didn’t need oxygen, my breathing sped, raced as fast as it had when I was burning. This was a different kind of fire. But she shouldn't be breathing rapidly. That's an involuntary physiological reaction to get oxygen into your body, something vampires don't need to do. quote:Embarrassed, I half-stepped away in another instantaneous movement. You don't have to keep saying you don't need to breathe. We get it. quote:How different this kissing was! I read his expression as I compared the indistinct human memories to this clear, intense feeling. He looked… a little smug. No bed will survive these two. quote:I frowned as I considered that, and then Edward was not the only one laughing. That's gonna get really annoying if she keeps listing exact times for everything. quote:“Overwhelmed. There’s so much.…” I trailed off, listening to the bell-tone of my voice again. This is getting to the point where it feels like a fanfic of itself. Now we get to have Carlisle gush over Bella being the most perfect vampire to ever be born. quote:I thought about the wild mood swings, the difficulty concentrating, and whispered, “I’m not sure about that.” That's how you always were, Bella. quote:He nodded seriously, and then his jeweled eyes glittered with interest. “It seems like we did something right with the morphine this time. Tell me, what do you remember of the transformation process?” Oh, so she's just going to stay quiet about the morphine then. quote:“Everything was… very dim before. I remember the baby couldn’t breathe.…” Now this is definitely feeling like an awful fanfic. quote:I focused on my poker face. I’d never been much of a liar. “It’s hard to remember. It was so dark before. And then… I opened my eyes and I could see everything.” "I've never been much of a liar," I lied. quote:“Amazing,” Carlisle breathed, his eyes alight. They're fawning over her now. quote:Chagrin washed through me, and I waited for the heat to burn in my cheeks and give me away. And then I remembered that I would never blush again. Maybe that would protect Edward from the truth. If I never see the word "chagrin" again, it will be too soon. quote:I’d have to find a way to tip off Carlisle, though. Someday. If he ever needed to create another vampire. That possibility seemed very unlikely, which made me feel better about lying. Just tell the truth! For the love of God, for once, just tell the truth! quote:“I want you to think—to tell me everything you remember,” Carlisle pressed excitedly, and I couldn’t help the grimace that flashed across my face. I didn’t want to have to keep lying, because I might slip up. And I didn’t want to think about the burning. Unlike the human memories, that part was perfectly clear and I found I could remember it with far too much precision. If vampires have perfect recall of everything, including their worst and most painful memories, they should all be incredibly hosed up psychologically. quote:“Oh, I’m so sorry, Bella,” Carlisle apologized immediately. “Of course your thirst must be very uncomfortable. This conversation can wait.” Midjack nailed it: not only does she skip the "feral bloodlust" part, she barely even notices her thirst until she thinks about it! quote:But Carlisle’s assumption brought the burn to the forefront of my mind. Suddenly, the dry ache was all I could think about, and the more I thought about it, the more it hurt. My hand flew up to cup my throat, like I could smother the flames from the outside. The skin of my neck was strange beneath my fingers. So smooth it was somehow soft, though it was hard as stone, too. That makes no sense at all. quote:Edward dropped his arms and took my other hand, tugging gently. “Let’s hunt, Bella.”
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You know, I'm starting to think there are no stakes in this vampire story.
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Jun 10, 2020 17:32
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Grammarchist posted:You know, I'm starting to think there are no stakes in this vampire story. You have no idea how low-stakes this will end up. It's frankly insulting to literature at a certain point.
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Grammarchist posted:You know, I'm starting to think there are no stakes in this vampire story. I was going to make a pun about her being thirsty all right, but this is better.
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