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Inspirational story for young children as always! "Go do your daddy's hobbies with him sometimes instead of only doing your own stuff that he doesn't care about! If you don't, one day he might just die and then be a ghost for all eternity because you never went on a walk with him!"
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Trapezium Dave posted:We're two weeks in to an eight week comic, so there's exactly enough time for three more of these. Can't wait! So like, I don't think every story has to Say Something. It doesn't have to necessarily make some kind of great statement about stuff. You can just tell a story that's entertaining, endearing, that processes a mood. It can just convey an Emotion or a Feeling or a Vibe. But this, so far, this is just. This is just nothing. The punchline really is just going to be "Haha his unfinished business, as introduced in the page before this, was no one went for walks with him. He got to go for a walk and complain about his family which he hated, and finally he's experienced relief!" And that's it. What even like... VIBE do you take from this? What am I supposed to GET out of having read this? Nothing, because Mookie only ever writes for himself, and he just wanted to complain about how his family doesn't go for walks with him or something I guess? Mookie please you'd be better off just doing terribly drawn porn like the vgcats guy does now instead of just trying to make your vent journals into comics.
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Mar 22, 2024 06:38
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FlocksOfMice posted:There's. There's no way it just ends there. That's nothing. That's a 3 paragraph microfic. That's a Tumblr prompt flash fic. There's not enough space to do more than one more of these, if that's going to be like, a comic of little vignettes of this?? Mookie??? Yeah that's what I'm figuring - this is our introduction to the spirit shepherd and she's going to have some other adventure rather then helping this guy out.
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Mar 22, 2024 06:39
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Heliotrope posted:Yeah that's what I'm figuring - this is our introduction to the spirit shepherd and she's going to have some other adventure rather then helping this guy out. It had better be the intro. Cause if it ain't, then... Well, I was about to go into a screed about how Mookie doesn't know the first thing about making a story, but we've had evidence a-plenty of that before.
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Mar 22, 2024 06:43
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Turns put all he really ever wanted was for someone to listen to him complain about his bitch cripple wife and his snotnosed jock kid
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Mar 22, 2024 06:58
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Turns out being a spirit shepherd is basically Crazy Taxi without the music.
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Mar 22, 2024 07:20
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The opposite of storytelling.
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Mar 22, 2024 08:43
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Pulsarcat posted:I dunno, I think this might work better if he didn't have a wife and kid. Yeah seriously. A lonely man who pined for companionship in life finally getting a chance in death. Instead we hear about Pancake McGee hating his family and walking to get away from them.
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Mar 22, 2024 09:05
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Turns out being a spirit shepherd like loving a bog witch, you never have to get their name.
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Mar 22, 2024 09:10
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This is exactly what happens when you don't plan your stories and wait to 'be surprised' by characters with the depth of a paddling pool. Mookie started this with no idea what the ghost's unfinished business was, and in the end realised the only characterisation that he could base it on was 'goes on walks to escape family'.
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Mar 22, 2024 09:11
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Guiding spirits into the afterlife is slightly more impersonal than ordering a coffee at Starbucks.
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Mar 22, 2024 09:13
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Why doesn't Mookie just come up with a name for each character he creates? He keeps saying that he "Likes to be surprised" yet never bothers to explore each page as it's being created. Mookie knows no more about these two assholes than we do. Isn't he even just a little bit curious about who these people are? He created a whole backstory for ghostdude, an entire family, a history, but he never bothered to give him a name. What the gently caress?
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Mar 22, 2024 09:48
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I'll go ahead and say I don't really hate this; a guy who pased away and left a wife and child behind, and those were important to him, but his innermost, selfish, most personal regret was just being unable to share a day's hike with someone. I think that's fine.
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Mar 22, 2024 10:51
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Hippocrass posted:Why doesn't Mookie just come up with a name for each character he creates? he's running out of people he knew from college
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YF-23 posted:I'll go ahead and say I don't really hate this; a guy who pased away and left a wife and child behind, and those were important to him, but his innermost, selfish, most personal regret was just being unable to share a day's hike with someone. I think that's fine.
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Mar 22, 2024 12:05
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The story premise is fine, my problem is the execution.
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Mar 22, 2024 12:12
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Mar 22, 2024 14:37
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Anyone else find it extremely weird that Spirit Shepherd (who is, yet again, another nameless woman) is used to comfort Spookie and tell him he's such a good softboi?
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Mar 22, 2024 14:53
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She's a woman and he's a Mookie, that's how they work. Joke aside, if any character can get away with comforting people and telling them what a good person they are, it's someone who's job it is to calm down restless spirits and help them move on. It would obviously be better if Shepherd were more like Suze from the Mediator series whos prefered mediation method is breaking a ghost's nose, but not all ghost shepherding stories can be as good as that series aimed at teen girls.
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Mar 22, 2024 15:01
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The repetition of "200 years" is still so weird. If it were in the hands of anyone else I'd think maybe there's Something Else going on other than the Mavpel Syrup Breakfast Club playing jacks with the rules of reality. but then I remember where i am and lmao "callan has the blessing of magic but it's about to move to maltak" and the students loving with how magic works is a response to an unconscious american-neolib fear of weakening american global hegemony playing out in the background, bet
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Mar 22, 2024 15:18
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It has been 200 years since I had a good idea.
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Mar 22, 2024 15:25
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It's hilarious. The Heart of Magic, WHICH IS THE FACE OF GOD: "Power moves in cycles. Callan had its turn, now it's the ethnic minority that was previously brutalized's turn." Mookie Prime: "LIKE gently caress IT IS."
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Mar 22, 2024 15:26
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Tesseraction posted:It has been 200 years since I had a good idea. Rounding down, huh
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Mar 22, 2024 15:37
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Wasn't it supposed to move to the orcs next? Because other than Arudak having those papermancer skills he quickly forgot, I don't think we've actually seen orcs do any magic in Legacy, do we?
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Mar 22, 2024 15:38
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The nameless bog witch was an orc, I'm pretty sure. And she definitely had magic, even if most of it involved pond scum and vomit. That other lake-dwelling entity who pukes magic beer, though, that was the best character.
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Mar 22, 2024 16:41
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As the only person in 200 years to walk this extremely well-maintained hiking trail that leads from the plains through a jungle into a rocky wasteland and terminates in a Pokemon Cave, I always wished I could've walked it with someone else.
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FlocksOfMice posted:So like, I don't think every story has to Say Something. It doesn't have to necessarily make some kind of great statement about stuff. You can just tell a story that's entertaining, endearing, that processes a mood. It can just convey an Emotion or a Feeling or a Vibe. But this, so far, this is just. This is just nothing. The punchline really is just going to be "Haha his unfinished business, as introduced in the page before this, was no one went for walks with him. He got to go for a walk and complain about his family which he hated, and finally he's experienced relief!" And that's it. What even like... VIBE do you take from this? What am I supposed to GET out of having read this? Yeah I think 'he just had to finish his last walk' is a fine payoff for a vignette, but there was no story, mood... Anything. It barely even feels like it happened.
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Eight-Six posted:"callan has the blessing of magic but it's about to move to maltak" and the students loving with how magic works is a response to an unconscious american-neolib fear of weakening american global hegemony playing out in the background, bet RoboChrist 9000 posted:It's hilarious. The impression I've been getting is basically that since Dominick burned out his powers beating the big bad, the whole point of making magic more democratic or whatever was so that he could access it again. Like his students rewrote the rules of nature (with his guidance, so he can get the credit for it) to make sure he didn't have to lose anything in the long run. I don't think we've seen Dominick use magic other than the dream stuff yet in Legacy, and I'm not sure that counts, but that's the feeling I get.
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He no sooner established a conflict than resolved it. Honestly this would almost work as the setup to a long-form comic about the Spirit Shepherd but we know we're getting six more weeks of this tops so 
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I wouldn't have minded his walk being his unfinished business if the story ended with him coming to terms with his death and passing through his own volition rather than it just being some kind of switch that turned off. This way he portrays it there should be millions of ghosts who died in the middle of doing something.
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Eight-Six posted:The repetition of "200 years" is still so weird. If it were in the hands of anyone else I'd think maybe there's Something Else going on other than the Mavpel Syrup Breakfast Club playing jacks with the rules of reality.       stellar writing
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Mar 22, 2024 23:33
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rudecyrus posted:
She's looking for the specific ghost of a Manchurian candidate so she has to keep repeating the trigger word.
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Mar 23, 2024 01:12
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Hey, how long has this guy been dead? The comic is extremely unclear.
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Mar 23, 2024 01:56
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Cemetry Gator posted:Hey, how long has this guy been dead? The comic is extremely unclear. Exactly 200 years, to the minute
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Rotten Red Rod posted:Exactly 200 years, to the minute Wow, what are the odds?
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Mar 23, 2024 19:59
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Spookie died on his way back to his home planet.
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Mar 23, 2024 20:07
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Rotten Red Rod posted:Exactly 200 years, to the minute So is this taking place simultaneously with Snout's adventures and Makena's trip and the dwarf feminist revolution? I think the figure "200 years" has come up in all of them.
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TBF we don't know that Snut's adventure happened 200 years after original DD either, we only know that the book he was reading was written 200 years after. That book could be 10, 20, 100, or 10,000 years old for all we know. But I doubt that this thought has ever corssed Mookie's mind so it happened exactly 200 years and the book was written yesterday I guess.
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