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Try this: "Really, really, really, ridiculously good."
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SurreptitiousMuffin posted:Phonetic accents are terrible unless you know the variety really, really well and even then it's dodgy. Irvine Welsh is about the only exception I can think of and even that wears on me after a while. Unless it serves a very specific purpose to the story, keep it out. I would say...seth effreckin?
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sebmojo posted:Kiwi, IIRC. I can't tell the difference between SA and Australian/Kiwi when written in dialect
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It's interesting, but I would say maybe too many names in the first sentence. Referring to the king as...well, "the king" provides enough info. I would argue that you can refer to "the assassin" as well. Just my thoughts.
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justcola posted:I was wondering if/how other people celebrate when they've finished a large project? I'm probably going to finish my book today and usually treat myself with cheap cigars and fortified wine, though I'm thinking of something a little classier this time around. Good cigars and Blanton's?
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supermikhail posted:but I've got my own process which hasn't involved other people much so far, and I prefer it that way. Are you writing a diary or something?
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The worst is in-world quotes. And the greatest among ye, rise from the smool and wield the power axe against your enemies, for if your strength is naught surely no manmonkey can withstand them. -- Verse from a sermon given by the High Lord Executioner P'Fluthmoz to the Bhagavad Hot Carl before the great Ceremony of Noogies
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Fair enough.. I'm thinking of stuff I read and think "that's pretty silly," like a quote by one of the characters or some history that has nothing to do with the story being told. I can't think of anything specific though so ignore me.
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I think comma splicing is great, especially when writing in first person or a deep third person limited, since that's how people think. Gotta go to the car, get my gun. rear end in a top hat thinks he can do me like that? We'll see. I'll whip his teeth out his mouth, make him hurt. Then spread his brains across the wall.
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Feb 28, 2013 19:24
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Chillmatic posted:This thread's getting a bit anemic. Predicting the inevitable chorus of "Just write it, anything works if done well, blah blah." I feel like the inciting event, meaning the thing that sets the story in motion, is something that should have happened before the start of the novel, or that happens right at the outset. That doesn't mean that laying some groundwork before this happens isn't possible. It also doesn't mean that you can't have some kind of major catalyst that hits after an inciting incident occurs, raising the stakes of the inciting incident. But I think it's a good idea to have the inciting incident take place at the end of the first chapter at the latest. I think you can do this a million different ways, though. There are also many definitions of what, exactly, qualifies as an "inciting incident." A character can learn that her estranged father has died (inciting event), and travel to the family home to take care of the estate only to be assaulted by a burglar rummaging though the home's safe and discover that her father's death is more than it seemed (catalyst).
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Roquentin posted:Write the piece, then eddit Is this intentionally funny or should I feel sorry for you?
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Mar 26, 2013 18:22
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Read a book.
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I meant it seriously. Whenever I feel a minor block like that, I read a new book. Reading is like a jump start motivator to write: what I like in the writing, how I would write a scene differently than the author, what works, what doesn't. So I should have put all that but I thought it was self evident.
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Mar 29, 2013 12:54
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sebmojo posted:If you ever find your characters answering each others' questions, rewrite. I get this as a warning against overly expository dialogue, but would you explain a little more what you mean?
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May 20, 2013 14:18
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Goddamn, you're boring.
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May 31, 2013 03:59
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Fear and Loathing In Las Vegas has some pretty great stream of consciousness drug writing, but that's a pretty unique level of both drug use and writing. You should read it anyway because it's great.
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magnificent7 posted:Augh goddammit. It sounds bad and should be rewritten. He hit the ground [a little description would be nice here]. The driver jumped out and ran over, but there was nothing to be done. The bum was coughing blood out onto the asphalt.
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Jun 15, 2013 03:26
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Are you loving serious
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BlueInkAlchemist posted:I have a courtroom scene I need to knock out. It's an arraignment. Does Law & Order get that part of the courtroom procedure right, or can I get directions to another source I can draw reference material from so the scene feels authentic? Law & Order is typically heavy on banter from the judges, and zealousness from the lawyers, but generally they have the procedure correct. Depending on what kind of court you're in (federal, state) the affair may be more wooden or livelier. I know criminal court here in New Orleans has more of a zoo atmosphere whereas federal court is more like a library.
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Jul 29, 2013 23:25
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Also if you are doing a scene in Federal court where someone is getting sentenced, remember federal sentences run in months, not years, and are based on guidelines.
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TheRamblingSoul posted:Thank you for the advice. I think you have the right idea. You are better off writing this in a way that is clearly narrative. What I mean is instead of relating all of the dialogue like you do, just tell the story. Imagine yourself as the guy sitting in the chair, talking to your therapist (i.e. your readers). Anything else is absolutely too convoluted. e.g.: quote:Look Bob, seeing as you charge by the hour I don't mind getting straight to the point. My dick stays limper than a wet hot dog bun, even when I'm watching dogfucking. And to answer your other question about paragraphs, if I understand you correctly, you break up paragraphs within spoken dialogue by starting a new paragraph with an open quotation mark (but don't close the end of the paragraph). Like this: quote:"I was explaining to this guy how to write dialogue. Well, it was more about punctuation than actually how to write dialogue, but I'm pretty sure he would benefit from learning how to write dialogue, considering how bad the stuff he posted was.
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