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Stuporstar posted:I'd love to see a story where the theme is mirrors, and you fill the story with them, and yet you manage to have the character not look at themselves--not once. The way to do this is simple: have the lead dislike himself and his appearance and then use the mirrors as an analogy for judging others harshly because all you see in them is yourself. God damnit this tale of alienation, pariah-hood and self loathing sounds like something sad I'd write for father's day.
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# ¿ Jun 15, 2014 00:22 |
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# ¿ May 21, 2024 22:44 |
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We've all heard the maxim "show don't tell". Can I get a example of too much show? I also need some help with structuring dialog.
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# ¿ Jun 27, 2014 00:33 |
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Djeser posted:What part of dialogue are you having trouble with? Putting together a conversation, putting together individual lines, the tags (he said, etc)? The tags and ways to potray verbal idiosyncrasies. (Stammers, distorted vocal pitches, heavy accents etc)
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# ¿ Jun 27, 2014 01:12 |
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sebmojo posted:Jacques Sauniere, reknowned curator, pulled his elegant and stylish coat around him against the cold and eyed the famous rock singer, who was called Mick Jagger. "Your pants are too large for you, sir," he said. The legendary rock singer smiled because he knew his pants were exactly the right size to hold the eleven inch ball of pure gold with a street value of one million dollars he had stuffed down there. Son of a bitch http://i.somethingawful.com/images/emot-dance.gif My issue is that I don't know to depict three guys arguing with their mentor. They keep talking over each other until the mentor loses his cool and breaks into a rant.
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# ¿ Jun 27, 2014 01:24 |
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sebmojo posted:Each of the three is having a different conversation, in his head, than the others. They keep correcting each other on what they're actually talking about. So how would I portray that? I basically gave up and made each of them take their turns and collectively guffaw at the mentor's outrageous indifference.
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# ¿ Jun 27, 2014 01:42 |
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gently caress, you people are way better than me. Another Question: What's the proper sound effect for getting kicked in the dick? [italics] He crumpled with a squeel[/italics] just isn't doing it for me. quote:Lamenting his crushed manhood, Byron contorted in a puddle of his own hemorrhaging piss.
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# ¿ Jun 27, 2014 01:55 |
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sebmojo posted:sithsaver, fyi, italics is [ i ] and [ / i ] (without the spaces, or you can highlight the text and go ctrl i) and you do emoticons by going : (emoticon name) :. Stop being smarter than me!
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# ¿ Jun 27, 2014 03:02 |
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What are your opinions on editors? Can you dump entire chapters on them or is that ghost writing?
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# ¿ Jun 28, 2014 05:31 |
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I'm asking about submitted chapters that are deemed unworkable.
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# ¿ Jun 28, 2014 06:49 |
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Dr. Kloctopussy posted:You don't submit chapters, you submit entire works. If multiple chapters are "unworkable" you are unlikely to find an agent or a publisher (who editors work for) to take on the project. It did. I obviously know nothing.
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# ¿ Jun 28, 2014 07:01 |
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crabrock posted:EXT. BUSY STREETS - Night Isn't that writing structure only suited to screenwriting?
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# ¿ Jul 3, 2014 00:09 |
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qntm posted:Snow Crash also has one chapter end with the protagonist running out of a town with a bunch of angry people pursuing him, collects his motorbike, and the final line is "...and the rest of it is just a chase scene." Which is quite a neat way of doing it. 1. How do you handle all the changes in dynamic that may occur if you switch a character's gender? 2. What are the signs that tell you when to quit a story?
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# ¿ Jul 4, 2014 08:07 |
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Djeser posted:1. Rewrite all those parts that would be different 2. So you shouldn't power through malaise and writer's block?
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# ¿ Jul 4, 2014 08:16 |
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Comma placement question:quote:...blah blah passed by downtown Atlanta enough to recognize the City, and wherever he was going, downtown Atlanta wasn't it. 1. Is this wrong? 2. Should I have written "but wherever he was..." instead of "and wherever"?
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# ¿ Jul 8, 2014 05:51 |
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LOU BEGAS MUSTACHE posted:it looks like the second part is an interjection but the third part isnt a direct continuation of the first part. which is why i think you wrote it like that in the first place. So...what should I do exactly? I held off on the semicolon because I'd already used one in the same paragraph.
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# ¿ Jul 8, 2014 07:09 |
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God Over Djinn posted:Make it two sentences. But if you don't have any intuitions about how that sentence sounds, I'd hazard a guess that your writing has other problems you'd do better to spend your time worrying about. Why do you think I'm asking the question?
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# ¿ Jul 8, 2014 08:08 |
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The Saddest Rhino posted:Are you being sarcastic to people giving you advice because lol Obviously I have a lot to learn. Here's the old sentence in full: "Nevertheless, Stephen had passed through the area enough times to recognize the City, and wherever he was headed, Downtown Atlanta wasn't it." I changed the aforementioned mentioned comma into a semicolon. For some reason this breaks the stream of consciousness and metanarrative but whatever. Sithsaber fucked around with this message at 09:24 on Jul 8, 2014 |
# ¿ Jul 8, 2014 09:20 |
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Anomalous Blowout posted:This would 100% no foolin' abso-loving-lutely flow better if you just turned it into two sentences. Read it out loud, then read it out loud with a period after "city." Never write anything after 4 in the morning.
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# ¿ Jul 8, 2014 14:59 |
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LOU BEGAS MUSTACHE posted:no, thats the best time to write, just edit when you're wide awake. Really?
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# ¿ Jul 8, 2014 15:50 |
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Now I'm confused.
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# ¿ Jul 8, 2014 16:36 |
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blue squares posted:I know I haven't been doing anything to contribute to good discussion, but this thread got a whole lot worse when Sithsaber found it. Someone report this. I always get probated when I tell off the whiners who follow me around. This is a advice thread, genius.
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# ¿ Jul 8, 2014 17:06 |
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God Over Djinn posted:Sorry for being snippy earlier, but what I was hoping to stave off was exactly this. My whole point was: it's not a question that's worth getting confused over. You have a number of good writers telling you that various solutions are all fine, which should suggest that it's largely a matter of context and personal preference. But if you're still at a point where you don't have an 'ear' to choose between multiple technically correct options, then you definitely don't need to be spending this much time and energy on a single relatively uninteresting sentence. You're wasting your own time. Just write. 1. I use this thread as a launching point. 2. I nitpick 3. I've been a bit eclectic lately. Right now I'm trying to get over the sloppiness that comes with texting everything, but I'll link a couple things tonight.
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# ¿ Jul 8, 2014 17:16 |
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Sitting Here posted:what's a metanarrative It's not what I thought it was. What I meant was a story that referenced itself and what was being thought about when I got the idea for the story.
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# ¿ Jul 8, 2014 19:37 |
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Oxxidation posted:And nothing makes this "advice thread" unhappy like some pompous rear end-jack asking increasingly picayune questions in a transparent attempt to make other people an accessory to procrastination. Punctuation advice? Really? Really. 1. I had to hold off on the library today. Some of us have jobs. 2. Why wouldn't I ask questions about punctuation? Your whining is stupid. 3. Fandom is basically a different medium. 4. Tomorrow you whiner. I don't have WiFi.
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# ¿ Jul 9, 2014 02:15 |
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Keromaru5 posted:If you're having that much trouble with punctuation, don't come to a bunch of people on a message board. Read The Elements of Style. Once you've gotten the hang of its rules, then you can figure out when and where they're necessary. Ultimately, it's a matter of personal judgment, but judgment built on a solid foundation. That loser was referencing something I texted last month. TEXTED. I even had a disclaimer complaining about how I lost most of it when messing with gmail drafts. The only thing that I've seriously posted here that ended up horrible was Harmonshock, and that was a parody I lost interest in on day one and only completed because I needed to practice following through. (In my head it was a screenplay I never got around to editing) Ps. And tell that other guy that we can both gently caress off. I'm not going to apologize for getting people's take on a sentence I was hung up on. Pps. Thanks for reminding me about that book. I should probably read it before I order Zarathustra. (USER WAS PUT ON PROBATION FOR THIS POST)
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# ¿ Jul 9, 2014 02:41 |
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I was thinking that tiny doses of run on sentences instead of periods and semicolons quickly express my roaming train of thought.
Sithsaber fucked around with this message at 06:03 on Jul 9, 2014 |
# ¿ Jul 9, 2014 05:56 |
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Chillmatic posted:All too often, some people attempt to make an argument by attacking and insulting those who hold opposing views. Mr. Sithsaber's remonstrations are a perfect example. Before I launch into my main topic, I want to make a few matters crystal-clear: (1) Sithsaber brandishes the word “crystallographically” as a kind of up-to-date jack-o'-lantern to scare children, and (2) as a result of that, the world would be a much better place to live if Sithsaber just stopped trying to feed us ever-larger doses of his lies and crackpot assumptions. Now that you know where I stand on those issues, I can safely say that I want to thank him for his surmises. They give me an excellent opportunity to illustrate just how feral Sithsaber can be. Life isn't fair. We've all known this since the beginning of time, so why is he so compelled to complain about situations over which he has no control? The complete answer to that question is a long, sad story. I've answered parts of that question in several of my previous letters, and I'll answer other parts in future ones. For now, I'll just say that it's easy enough to hate him any day of the week on general principles. But now I'll tell you about some very specific things that he is up to, things that ought to make a real Sithsaber-hater out of you. First off, he has a well-exercised contempt for other cultures. The mere mention of that fact guarantees that this letter will never get published in any mass-circulation periodical over which Sithsaber has any control. But that's inconsequential because honor means nothing to Sithsaber. Principles mean nothing to Sithsaber. All he cares about is how best to use our weaknesses to his advantage. (Fart) There's my rebuttal. If I can't get around to posting some poo poo in the next 24 hours, feel free to ignore me.
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# ¿ Jul 9, 2014 13:56 |
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DivisionPost posted:Why wait 24 hours when I can start now? I'm using a PHHHHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOONNNNE. PS. I also messed myself up be reading "My Life in the Bush of Ghosts".
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# ¿ Jul 9, 2014 14:48 |
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crabrock posted:i only feel good when i write something people like, not when i pat myself on the back for putting words on the page. i guess people have different approaches to self-esteem. Panderfapfap pander fap. If Oxxi is still crying he should use the search feature while I'm away. I'm sure I have some overblown cartoon analysis he can enjoy.
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# ¿ Jul 9, 2014 16:07 |
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quote:I'm just going to assume you're trolling at this point, as you've produced no writing and have just started insulting people for no reason. I wasn't even talking to you, idiot. I wrote 100,000 words last year, and not all of them make me proud of myself. I'll paste something to tide you over while I edit and go to work. Here's a loose prologue to an old "Tale From Ominy" I'm currently fixing. I hope I can get to the library to post the rest of it. quote:
I'll post the various short stories in their appropriate threads and than link them here. Endriver is almost 3000 words so it'll need it's own thread.
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# ¿ Jul 9, 2014 17:58 |
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tEcho Cian posted:Same for me pretty much; hell, I've had someone offer to buy me books if I write just a bit more of my novel, and there it still sits (I bought the books myself). I automatically drift to any excuse not to write - irc, MMOs, even Solitaire as long as it's not writing, which annoys me to no end. I've even tried removing all my shortcuts and it doesn't work. quote:
I edited abit but left illusion because the witch is actively shaping the hallucination. This ministory is supposed to be a worldbuilding tie in to another work which I'll link in a second. I was going to carve icons of her story into the walls Skye in style before I gave up and decided the frescoes would be destroyed by weathering. My next question was going to be how to organically introduce a person's name after mostly going with their Title without settling for exposition dialogue. Seeing how the thread has turned on me for supposedly being a interloper, I decided to edit and post some old poo poo while I finish up on "The Hindsight". I put the shorts in the snippets thread: forgive the phone hosed formatting. http://forums.somethingawful.com/showthread.php?threadid=3527097&pagenumber=15#lastpost http://forums.somethingawful.com/showthread.php?threadid=3649617&pagenumber=1#lastpost Ps. God damned spellcheck might have hosed a lot of this up. Sithsaber fucked around with this message at 20:13 on Jul 10, 2014 |
# ¿ Jul 10, 2014 20:10 |
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Sitting Here posted:Thunderdome? Literary? "Top-level contributors"? CC people's "Overwhelming feedback" is what's keeping your from writing right now? I get what you're saying but one of of the guys in the sister thread did tell me not to question his critiques before he moved on to the next one.This is odd because some of us want a bit of give or take we can think about instead of simple editing. Ps. He didn't edit anything. I think he meant that I shouldn't get touchy about advised corrections/ "excuses". How would you guys handle train of thought? How does it fare when the writer is playing with omission? Sithsaber fucked around with this message at 00:04 on Jul 11, 2014 |
# ¿ Jul 10, 2014 23:50 |
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Do we have to add an extra step before introducing minority protagonists? I've heard that the reader tends to project themselves into and identify with traditional conventions like white leads, and that not going with an ethnic name or behavior right off the bat can lead the reader to be jarred by what to them is a out of nowhere ethnicity reveal/ identification of the character they invested in with "the other" outliers.
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# ¿ Jul 14, 2014 05:16 |
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General Battuta posted:
As a dark skinned hispanic, I reserve the right to feel ostracized by society at large. I just don't know how to organically buildup racial tension without mocking Dixie or throwing in gratuitous spanish.
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# ¿ Jul 14, 2014 06:08 |
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General Battuta posted:I totally respect your right to feel ostracized, but I'm not sure I understand how that connects to the question you're asking. You shouldn't feel like you have to pigeonhole your characters to please readers. Have you read Junot Diaz? I think he's very good at handling stuff like this in his writing. He illustrates a lot of the attitudes his characters negotiate (and hold) without coming right out and explaining things. I'm trying to figure out how to show my character's race without turning them into a caricature or something dishonest to my story. Ps. I would go into detail if the story in question wasn't a part of my thunderdome brawl.
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# ¿ Jul 14, 2014 06:18 |
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General Battuta posted:If your character's name doesn't convey the information up front, you can always just say it. Sometimes dancing around and trying to do it indirectly is pretty awkward. I know that must sound really disjointed from my advice above - I wish I had an example of someone doing it really well to show you. I've decided to emulate Brian d' Amato and just talk poo poo about the confederate battle flag. Ps. By right of blood and skin palette I reserve the right to use the phrase "ethnic name". By my inpronunciable title, I claim "ethnic in perpetuity (USER WAS PUT ON PROBATION FOR THIS POST)
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# ¿ Jul 14, 2014 06:44 |
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SoundMonkey posted:Dude I appreciate that you want help with writing but I beg of you, please try to express yourself in a non-insane way so that people can help you better. My joke actually summed up the problem behind my question. When I used the word ethnic without revealing my ethnicity, General Battuta reacted a bit negatively. If I had said I was hispanic from the outset, he might have not taken offense. This relates to my question because I don't want to illicit this exact same reaction when I forget to include basic information like common social tensions or a otherwise completely integrated character who out of nowhere complains about country music or rice and beans. My crazy joke was just me poking fun at how quickly that guy withdrew his critique once I revealed my skin color.
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# ¿ Jul 15, 2014 04:40 |
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General Battuta posted:My critique's not withdrawn. I'm not going to lecture you on how to experience race, but people of all backgrounds end up writing badly about the topic. I just meant the use of the phrase "ethnic name" mainly because you were right to assume that my name is ethic.(and that's okay)
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# ¿ Jul 15, 2014 04:45 |
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Should I care more about freytag's pyramid/dramatic arc or Campbell's monomyth/ story circle?
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# ¿ Jul 15, 2014 06:10 |
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# ¿ May 21, 2024 22:44 |
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systran posted:I'm mostly plugging the lectures from YouTube, which are basically just like a free class taught by a guy who made a lot of money selling his genre books through traditional publishing. Sanderson taught the class at that weird Mormon university, and the website just has all the lectures from the class on Youtube. You could just go to the Youtube page and ignore the website entirely. Hook me up with some links.
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# ¿ Jul 17, 2014 00:32 |