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Twither twixt the telltale tuldering thithing twitter twat till it was unlikely that I had to have not gotten shot I pulled out of the parking lot and drove out from the side texting tweeting typing trying traveling to telluride Simmer smolder sunken shattered stretchers shaking shoulders guess I had to pay attention with the phone back in the holder My family hasn't gotten confirmation from the coroner for fear felching festering folktales F250 fulla foreigners Chafey fucked around with this message at 20:55 on Jan 23, 2014 |
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Bag of Hamsters posted:This may just be me, but if you're going to rhyme, commit to it. None of this assonance bullshit. What you're going for is unusual enough that no one will probably give a gently caress about proper pluralization. Which is the most egregious assonance? I thought you meant coroner / foreigners but to me shoulders is a less important pluralization... edit: oh oh oh are you talking about attention / confirmation? as for my input on De Capo: it seems like knowing the title of your poem is instrumental to understanding the conflict. Why did you choose brackets for a particular line? I've got no formal musician experience so I feel like there are references I'm missing. Chafey fucked around with this message at 23:07 on Jan 23, 2014 |
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breath clouds a sleek wood floor, subdued but alive the swelling that she has received is right below her eye "you hosed her didn't you" yells that oval office, anger tempered cries the man that has just hit her has shorts tight on his thighs and a yellow checkered flannel (with a novelty bow tie) and sandals adorned with glitter glue and plastic burgers and fries his socks run up past his kneecaps, neatly ending on his thighs his velociraptor t-shirt it says "dinos in disguise" but on the back you can see a sweater-vested guy, it references an anime, the plot's weird don't ask why. the elbow pads he wears, keep his elbows alive the motorcycle helmet is for motorcycle drive. the end
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