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Akett posted:I'm not getting a sense of writer's block here, all of what's going on was set up well enough that I was able to call exactly who sent the note. Zach has a plan, he wanted everything to be this complex and silly, he's setting things up for the future. Right now the problem is we don't yet know why so many of these scenes are needed to set up the chapter's climax. I'm guessing that at the moment the point of nerd girl is that she's just gonna be earnest and at first Max is paranoid but relaxes, which will give him an epiphany about how to approach Issac. I was really speaking more in general, not necessarily about this character per se. I don't doubt that Zack has a plan and knows all of the pieces to put into place, and most of the pacing issues would fade away when read in bulk, but I do wonder if on the drawing board the plan could've withstood a couple passes of killing his darlings. That's one of the perils of being a new writer and learning on the fly, you've got all these great ideas and you want to fit them all in now, but giving in to that urge causes the story to grow and bloat. Sometimes watching a story sort of explode this way through organic improv could be fun but that's not a guarantee. I'm mostly just here for characters being witty at each other with expressive faces so I'm not too put off by the pacing issues. But by now they're obvious enough that even a fairly well-foreshadowed development like this still feels disappointing to people who were wondering about one of the half dozen other little plot threads being juggled right now. And as an aside, yeah, this topic is well-trod territory for this thread but what can you do? Runa fucked around with this message at 09:42 on Feb 5, 2017 |
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I want to believe
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Feb 28, 2017 07:36
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Honestly? It's just a comment, much like how "I love how Ed Burger has become King Bean of Fighting Legume Hill" is a comment. There's nothing wrong with posting about how much you enjoy a thing and there's also nothing wrong with posting a valid criticism.
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That's never stopped posting before
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Mar 11, 2017 13:44
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Ed really has been climbing the character rankings I tells ya.
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Mar 14, 2017 06:56
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RandallODim posted:This page is the most I have ever liked Ed. He truly deserves the title of The Burger Child
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Mar 21, 2017 16:03
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I refuse to not take the gag seriously
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Jun 27, 2017 12:32
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Guess we know why Spender's car has a man's name.
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Nov 7, 2017 13:58
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Went to go take another look at hitball and drat, that was two years ago.
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kurona_bright posted:In what world is Spender good-looking Mr. Garcia's
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PMush Perfect posted:He better be careful with his hearing, or he'll be a tinny small medium at large. .....
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Haha Isaac you dingus
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tbf it's hard to beat The Good Place when it comes time for an ethics lesson but bless zack for trying
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Impossible...!
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Tollymain posted:hm the un-inviting a vampire bit? or Mr. President
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lmao Mr. Garcia's all flustered
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D7pA4Z9Nndg&t=86s
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That kid's got magic in his blood Stage magic
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Tollymain posted:i am agonist Looking forward to baru 3
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Oh my god
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Lmaooo I bet most of the people who called it were just joking
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You know what's not creepy? Getting carpal tunnel. Go out and gently caress up your wrists, everybody, it's the only decent thing to do out here.
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