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I thought you were going to post a short story that was criticized by your crit group for being overly moralistic?
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Dec 17, 2014 02:49
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So I didn't get very far through this. I actually didn't mind the melodramatic epigraph, but it was followed by 280 words of pure exposition and then 788 words of getting ready for school. That's over a thousand words of boring stuff where nothing happens. Surely his breakfast routine can be cut, and surely the exposition can be drip fed to us when it actually becomes relevant?
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Dec 17, 2014 03:15
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