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Victor Vermis
Dec 21, 2004


WOKE UP IN THE DESERT AGAIN

StuntKid posted:

1. Do you think people would be willing to watch a movie with an empathetic anti-hero even if he's an Afghan? Do you HAVE to see the Afghani man die in the end to satisfy an audience, especially military folks? Even if we understand why he'd want revenge?

2. Our Afghani father's motivations have nothing to do with this religion, Islam, and have everything to do with finding peace by killing his son's killer (even though it was accidental). Do you, as military folk think this is feasible or would the majority of people who have been in combat be unwilling to accept this viewpoint where religion has nothing to do with his motivations to find and kill a North American soldier?


I have a feeling your script is terrible.

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Fart Sandwiches
Apr 4, 2006

i never asked for this

Nostalgia4Infinity posted:

Also I demand GiP receive consulting credit.

Posting in dis thread for cred

StuntKid
Dec 10, 2003

Analogical posted:

It wouldn't be hard to believe that someone would be motivated by something other than Islam to want to start a revenge trip. What would be hard to get, honestly, is how capable your Afghan is in North America. The average working class Afghan has absolutely no means without external support to leave Afghanistan and would definitely not speak English, he'd be lucky if he even spoke both of Afghanistan's major languages and that's his own country. For me, regardless if his son was killed or the Koran has him infant-shaking-mad about something, I have no faith in his ability to follow through with any kind of plan to come kill a NA soldier without the support of a terrorist organization or some other group or charity. Maybe if your guy joins AQ to handle the logistics of his jihad I'd be able to get around the idea more, most people join AQ for reasons other than religion anyway.

tl;dr make the Afghan a Special Forces soldier and rename the movie "Green on Blue
Great feedback, thanks. That's how it plays out, through his Uncle's contacts and funding, he heads over here with a group of guys to help him, but they are extremists and have a larger plan, when our anti-hero really just wants revenge. This allows us to seperate him from using his religion as his motivation, as he has no will ill against people from North America and does believe we are there to help his family. In the end, his conflict with the extremists helps make his character stronger.
Thanks for the honest answer, it was great!

Anita Dickinme posted:

Now that I've actually read the OP I do have a (possibly) contributing thing. I've heard something (and Generation Kill) that Iraqis don't see death the same way as us and probably wouldn't go to the lengths of revenge. I don't know if that transfers to Afghans but they're basically the same thing. Right?
Interesting, I will have to look into this.

Booblord Zagats posted:

You're going to have knee jerk folks immediately poo poo on your movie because it's showing "Are Troops" as people who kill children, even if it is on accident. Protestors will be a problem in Texas, the South and other places. You will be fellated by angry college kids who think American Sniper was propaganda, right up until they realize the movie doesn't seem to be about how awful the West is, but instead about how awful human conflict is, then they'll rail against you on tumblr and twitter until someone in a high enough position accidentally calls a tranny by the wrong loving made up pro-noun.


All that said, it's a thought provoking premise and it does look like it might be a good watch. Though if you REALLY want me to like it, make sure every background TV has Four Lions playing on it
Hey bad publicity is free publicity. I know it'll probably do well in Canada at least. :P

FrozenVent posted:

Oooh, do the white dude and the afghan realize they're not that different after all, and decide to let each other live?
Should've clarified in my post that this is not your "typical revenge movie". Cause that doesn't happen in revenge movies, but we are aiming for a solution close to what your saying.

OZYMANDICKASS posted:

I have a feeling your script is terrible.
It can't be any worse than Taken 2.

krispykremessuck
Jul 22, 2005

unlike most veterans and SA members $10 is not a meaningful expenditure for me

I'm gonna have me a swag Bar-B-Q

StuntKid posted:

It can't be any worse than Taken 2.

have you ever seen ice twisters

Kung Fu Fist Fuck
Aug 9, 2009
why dont you just say canada instead of this ambiguous north america poo poo?

Victor Vermis
Dec 21, 2004


WOKE UP IN THE DESERT AGAIN

Kung Fu Fist gently caress posted:

why dont you just say canada instead of this ambiguous north america poo poo?

He's worried people won't be able to empathize with a muslim/afghan man who is motivated by the death of a child.

I think he's worried people don't know what a Canada is.

elite_garbage_man
Apr 3, 2010
I THINK THAT "PRIMA DONNA" IS "PRE-MADONNA". I MAY BE ILLITERATE.
So the Canadian gets hit by a Zamboni vbied

no one will see that one coming

EBB
Feb 15, 2005

krispykremessuck
Jul 22, 2005

unlike most veterans and SA members $10 is not a meaningful expenditure for me

I'm gonna have me a swag Bar-B-Q
op ask supermechagodzilla for advice please and report back

elite_garbage_man
Apr 3, 2010
I THINK THAT "PRIMA DONNA" IS "PRE-MADONNA". I MAY BE ILLITERATE.
ask blue squares to rewrite the script

Godholio
Aug 28, 2002

Does a bear split in the woods near Zheleznogorsk?

It practically writes itself.

Dude McAwesome
Sep 30, 2004

Still better than a Ponytar

elite_garbage_man posted:

ask blue squares to rewrite the script

pool parties and gangbangs. sweet

Victor Vermis
Dec 21, 2004


WOKE UP IN THE DESERT AGAIN
hth

FrozenVent
May 1, 2009

The Boeing 737-200QC is the undisputed workhorse of the skies.

StuntKid posted:

Should've clarified in my post that this is not your "typical revenge movie". Cause that doesn't happen in revenge movies, but we are aiming for a solution close to what your saying.

Dude, I was able to guess the ending to your movie after reading a rough synopsis... How much time do you spend reading tv tropes.org in an average week? I bet it's a lot, because that's the lamest ending possible and you seem to think it's original.

And yeah, revenge movies are real popular in Canada, that's why we've produced such classics as

Lazy Reservist
Nov 30, 2005

FUBIJAR
Make it so the plot follows the Afghan dude on his quest to get to America, only to find the soldier living in a trailer with his hambeast wife and eight kids (half of which are a different color), only to decide the poor soldier has suffered more than he ever could.

Dead Reckoning
Sep 13, 2011
Afghan commando travels half way around the world for a night raid on a hillbilly veteran's poppy marijuana grow, and hits him when he sneaks out on his wife to gently caress his livestock. What a twist!

EBB
Feb 15, 2005

Amateur filmmaker realizes his project is a turd and hangs himself

Mad Dragon
Feb 29, 2004

Canadian Veteran Crushed Under Pile of Afghan Rugs! Would you like to know more?

Kiryen
Feb 25, 2015

EVA BRAUN BLOWJOBS posted:

Amateur filmmaker realizes his project is a turd and hangs himself

StuntKid
Dec 10, 2003

FrozenVent posted:

Dude, I was able to guess the ending to your movie after reading a rough synopsis... How much time do you spend reading tv tropes.org in an average week? I bet it's a lot, because that's the lamest ending possible and you seem to think it's original.

And yeah, revenge movies are real popular in Canada, that's why we've produced such classics as

I don't even know what tv tropes.org is. Having an idea of the ending doesn't mean much these days, it's the execution that matters. Look at the majority of horror movies, it isn't usually too hard to guess what happens, but we still watch to see how well they do it. I'm not worried.

Kung Fu Fist gently caress posted:

why dont you just say canada instead of this ambiguous north america poo poo?
I'm not setting a country at this point in time, you kind of leave it open to investors who are interested. American investors won't want to invest in a story about a Canadian soldier, and vice versa. Kind of a habit at this time.

Lazy Reservist posted:

Make it so the plot follows the Afghan dude on his quest to get to America, only to find the soldier living in a trailer with his hambeast wife and eight kids (half of which are a different color), only to decide the poor soldier has suffered more than he ever could.
LOL, nice. I see a sequel in the works here.

Lazy Reservist
Nov 30, 2005

FUBIJAR
Make the sequel a buddy cop film.

Naked Bear
Apr 15, 2007

Boners was recorded before a studio audience that was alive!
Famous last words:

"Hey, watch this!"

"Hold my beer."

StuntKid posted:

I'm not worried.

Helldump Immunity.
Aug 2, 2013

Fuck you

Lazy Reservist posted:

Make the sequel a gay porn.

Kung Fu Fist Fuck
Aug 9, 2009

Booblord Zagats
Oct 30, 2011


Pork Pro
Feature a scene where the Canadian soldier spends 11 minutes trying to explain kilometers aren't the same thing as miles to an American e-4 then juxtapose it with another scene where the Afghan dude tries to explain the difference between girl pussy and boy pussy to some dude on the last leg of his London to Toronto flight

Zeris
Apr 15, 2003

Quality posting direct from my brain to your face holes.

Booblord Zagats posted:

Feature a scene where the Canadian soldier spends 11 minutes trying to explain kilometers aren't the same thing as miles to an American e-4 then juxtapose it with another scene where the Afghan dude tries to explain the difference between girl pussy and boy pussy to some dude on the last leg of his London to Toronto flight

Fister Roboto
Feb 21, 2008

Booblord Zagats posted:

Feature a scene where the Canadian soldier spends 11 minutes trying to explain kilometers aren't the same thing as miles to an American e-4 then juxtapose it with another scene where the Afghan dude tries to explain the difference between girl pussy and boy pussy to some dude on the last leg of his London to Toronto flight

I would watch the poo poo out of this.

Zeris
Apr 15, 2003

Quality posting direct from my brain to your face holes.
burp

Zeris fucked around with this message at 14:52 on May 12, 2015

Analogical
May 20, 2013

EEOD? Why not, I could use a break from work

:911:

Zeris posted:

For researching this film, have you considered going to Afghanistan and taking notes as you kill a child? It's fairly inexpensive.

:drat:

USMC503
Jan 15, 2012

For satisfactory performance while under the effects of hostile enemy alcohol.
You might have a hard time selling the concept it not being about a religious/cultural revenge killing. Revenge killing is a pretty big thing for Pashtuns.

krispykremessuck
Jul 22, 2005

unlike most veterans and SA members $10 is not a meaningful expenditure for me

I'm gonna have me a swag Bar-B-Q
it looks to me like you maybe should have actually called up an afghan or something to figure out if your poo poo even makes sense guy

Dead Reckoning
Sep 13, 2011

USMC503 posted:

You might have a hard time selling the concept it not being about a religious/cultural revenge killing. Revenge killing is a pretty big thing for Pashtuns.
Yeah, what ethnicity is this guy supposed to be? The actor you picked looks more Persian or Arab than Pashtun, Tajik or Uzbek.

Kung Fu Fist Fuck
Aug 9, 2009

krispykremessuck posted:

it looks to me like you maybe should have actually called up an afghan or something to figure out if your poo poo even makes sense guy

lmbo like they have phones in their mud huts

Victor Vermis
Dec 21, 2004


WOKE UP IN THE DESERT AGAIN

USMC503 posted:

You might have a hard time selling the concept it not being about a religious/cultural revenge killing. Revenge killing is a pretty big thing for Pashtuns.


Dead Reckoning posted:

Yeah, what ethnicity is this guy supposed to be? The actor you picked looks more Persian or Arab than Pashtun, Tajik or Uzbek.

:rolleyes:

I don't think most people are going to pick up on any of these things, guys.

I farted around irrigation canals my entire time in Afghanistan. If you told me there was a business man in Kabul who looks Persian, owns shoes, and doesn't poo poo on his own doorstep, I'd find that believable. Afghanistan is a big place.

Fister Roboto
Feb 21, 2008

Zeris posted:

For researching this film, have you considered going to Afghanistan and taking notes as you kill a child? It's fairly inexpensive.

It only costs one afghani.

Victor Vermis
Dec 21, 2004


WOKE UP IN THE DESERT AGAIN

Fister Roboto posted:

It only costs one afghani.

:golfclap:

Dingleberry
Aug 21, 2011
I'd watch it if it has Liam Neeson in the lead. But it should be him avenging the death of his underage wedding singer boy lover who was run over by a MRAP while fleeing rapey hash addled wedding guests.
It can be called Taken from Behind.

Liam: "Heylo my friend, what I have is unique skillset, like herding goat, putting manhood in goat, smoking hash and loving wedding singers, and I'm going to track you down and make you weddingsinginggoatlover, my friend..."

Kung Fu Fist Fuck
Aug 9, 2009
seeing liam neeson in mudface would be amazing

Helldump Immunity.
Aug 2, 2013

Fuck you

Kung Fu Fist gently caress posted:

seeing liam neeson in mudface would be amazing

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tyler
Jun 2, 2014

Kung Fu Fist gently caress posted:

seeing liam neeson in mudface would be amazing

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