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The Something Awful Forums > The Finer Arts > Creative Convention > Critique my reviews!
 
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Dire Chinchilla
Mar 27, 2013
 Everybody can edit the reviews you're posted, you should probably change the Google Docs settings before you'll just have the word PENIS written over and over.

In general, there are quite a few errors (typos, missing commas, but also more serious stuff) and redundancies. I'll just post a few of them...

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keeping the enemy in the air with a variety of moves that would keep them in a mid-air, juggled state
This is a really clumsy sentence, and I think you can see why.

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Mortal Kombat X switches between a cast of recurring characters as well as a newer generation of characters.
This just doesn't look good. It's a short sentence and it could be rewritten in a million ways to avoid repeating the word "characters".

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earthshattering
earth-shattering. There's no excuse for this one, Google Docs underlined it.

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Netherrealm’s attempts to clean up both character proportions and outfits are incredibly noble
...are you sure "noble" is the best word to use here? Because this sounds really odd to me.

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these towers lack the creativity and enjoyment
To me, this sounds as if you're expecting the towers to be creative and enjoy things.

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a gameplay stand point
standpoint

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that sets it apart from its piers
I suppose you mean "peers" and not those things:


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the games full plot kicks off in full
The game's. Also, you're not only repeating the word "full" right after you've used it, what does a "full plot" even mean in this context?

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