Under the Light of the Stars (6,100 words)

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The Something Awful Forums > The Finer Arts > Creative Convention > Under the Light of the Stars (6,100 words)

Guiness13: Feb 17, 2007; The best angel of all.

Looking for some feedback on the second full draft of a work in progress. Any feedback is appreciated.

Under the Light of the Stars about 6,100 words

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Thanks again for the feedback. It was massively helpful for the next two drafts.

Guiness13 fucked around with this message at 18:37 on Dec 31, 2015

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Guiness13: Feb 17, 2007; The best angel of all.

Thanks!

I had a feeling that I'd focused too much on the "What's happening" and lost track of the characters. This gave me a lot to think about going into prep for the next round of revisions. Again, thanks a lot. Sometimes I have a hard time getting decent feedback, and this is very helpful.

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