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In, assign me a bug. I would be grateful if it's not accounting software related.
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# ¿ Jan 8, 2016 08:03 |
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# ¿ Apr 30, 2024 20:56 |
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Drop that on leaflets into ISIS controlled Syria and watch them commit suicide in drives.
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# ¿ Jan 9, 2016 05:35 |
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In, with CRICKET.
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# ¿ Jan 19, 2016 00:31 |
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edited out.
newtestleper fucked around with this message at 11:35 on Jan 7, 2017 |
# ¿ Jan 25, 2016 04:59 |
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Djinn, Broenheim, Bluewher - thank you for the crit!
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# ¿ Jan 25, 2016 07:56 |
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Crit of Heel Turn by my SPORTS opponent WeLandedOnTheMoon! Character development It is hard to write a story in 1200 words that contains a full fledged character arc, but this story managed a very satisfying one. This was helped by a structure which really worked with the superhero/pro wrestler theme: 1. origin story 2. internal struggle with power 3. paying a price for taking the heroic way. This was the best aspect of the story, and what really made it pop. Prose The style was clear, simple, and nicely paced. There was one sentence that I had to reread a few times (the ink used to sign the document, smudgable and signed by José “Rabid” Rios, the head of the Olympic Professional Wrestling Federation) but otherwise there were no noticeable errors. On the other hand there was no passage that especially blew me away, but I don't think pretty writing was really the point here. This style lent itself especially well to the fight, which was easy to follow. Theme I understood the parallels between superheros and wrestling, but I feel like with an extra paragraph or two in either the first or middle part you really could have made this link more explicit. I think that it's difficult when drawing parallels between two things that are so similar to make them comment on each other in a meaningful way. That said it wasn't necessary as it still worked, but I think it was really close to being all tied up in a really neat way, but didn't quite make it. Tone There was some weird/interesting stuff going on with the tone. I kind of feel like the Olympic stuff was almost irrelevant to the rest of the story, and took it from something that was mainly serious into a kooky spec-fic sort of place where it didn't need to be. I'm not sure the tonal change between the first part and the italicized background info was bad per se, but it was definitely jarring. Maybe taking it out of the "Syrena" universe would allow you a little more freedom to make it work? Overall This was definitely a well above average TD story, that wasn't painful to read in the slightest. The fully realized character arc is what drew me into the story, and I wasn't disappointed when I got to the satisfying ending. Well done, honourable foe.
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# ¿ Jan 26, 2016 02:22 |
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In
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# ¿ Jan 26, 2016 20:32 |
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ty God Over God Over God Over Djinn
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# ¿ Feb 2, 2016 00:03 |
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Very excited to see the painting week stories! I'll give crits to all those who choose a painting week prompt. Edit: So I'm a judge so I'll be giving crits to everyone. Maybe I'll do line crits for painting week stories. newtestleper fucked around with this message at 02:04 on Feb 10, 2016 |
# ¿ Feb 10, 2016 02:00 |
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Tiebreaker for my judging will be whoever posted earlier. This could translate into a tiny fraction of an advantage if you get those subs in well before deadline, lallygaggers!
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# ¿ Feb 13, 2016 10:44 |
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# ¿ Feb 16, 2016 22:54 |
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In and
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# ¿ Feb 23, 2016 08:24 |
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PHYSICS: Jack Harvey, John Culvenor, Warren Payne, Steve Cowley, Michael Lawrance, David Stuart, and Robyn Williams of Australia, for their irresistible report "An Analysis of the Forces Required to Drag Sheep over Various Surfaces." PUBLISHED IN: Applied Ergonomics, vol. 33, no. 6, November 2002, pp. 523-31. edited out. newtestleper fucked around with this message at 11:35 on Jan 7, 2017 |
# ¿ Feb 29, 2016 05:56 |
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Yes, good crits! Thanks to both of you! IN with LIEKO A tree-trunk submerged at the bottom of a lake.
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# ¿ Mar 2, 2016 10:04 |
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Ironic Twist posted:In with Komorebi (Japanese). This is so dodgy. You have clearly pre-written a story and then suggested a prompt to fit.
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# ¿ Mar 3, 2016 00:15 |
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Rathlord posted:
You don't have to wait, but why wouldn't you? You have like four days to edit. Then your lovely prose might be slightly less lovely.
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# ¿ Mar 3, 2016 00:35 |
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# ¿ Mar 6, 2016 23:22 |
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edited out.
newtestleper fucked around with this message at 11:36 on Jan 7, 2017 |
# ¿ Mar 7, 2016 05:33 |
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Sitting Here posted:Are you tired of waiting for slow judging? Try all new Recaps! These are always so great! Thanks everyone who takes part, but especially sittinghere!
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# ¿ Mar 8, 2016 00:54 |
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Is synirc down for other people?
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# ¿ Mar 8, 2016 03:53 |
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sebmojo posted:sebmojo hosed around with this message at Mar 15, 2016 around 00:04
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# ¿ Mar 14, 2016 12:07 |
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# ¿ Mar 15, 2016 04:43 |
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# ¿ Mar 22, 2016 01:48 |
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Never has a newbie acting like a sore-losing little poo poo elicited such constructive responses from bitter vets. You're scum, CMK, the enterprising kind of scum who goes to great effort just to argue in bad faith.
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# ¿ Mar 24, 2016 04:55 |
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fine
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# ¿ Mar 26, 2016 05:22 |
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edited out.
newtestleper fucked around with this message at 11:36 on Jan 7, 2017 |
# ¿ Mar 28, 2016 05:24 |
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Dialogue is something I am not comfortable with, so in
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# ¿ Mar 29, 2016 04:44 |
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edited out.
newtestleper fucked around with this message at 11:36 on Jan 7, 2017 |
# ¿ Mar 30, 2016 05:18 |
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sebmojo posted:
terrible judging! I can only find one adverb in my whole story! (I'll grant you the irritating errors and punctuation)
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# ¿ Mar 30, 2016 06:22 |
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Carl Killer Miller posted:Where we're going, we don't need adverbs You'll get crits from the judges. Sometimes it takes a while.
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# ¿ Mar 30, 2016 21:07 |
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Ironic Twist posted:I know someone who might have dibs on that one I'm a judge :P
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# ¿ Apr 5, 2016 22:42 |
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in
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# ¿ Apr 12, 2016 01:38 |
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Flash rule please SH
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# ¿ Apr 18, 2016 03:22 |
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bottom o' the bo't, getting by to catch hold of the sheet an' untie it. He wasn't but a little man; I helped him right up after the squall passed, and made a handsome apology to him, but he did act kind o' offended." "I do think they ought not to settle them landlocked folks in parishes where they're liable to be on the water," insisted Mrs. Fosdick. "Think of the families in our parish that was scattered all about the bay, and what a sight o' sails you used to see, in Mr. Dimmick's day, standing across to the mainland on a pleasant Sunday morning, filled with church-going folks, all sure to want him some time or other! You couldn't find no doctor that would edited out. newtestleper fucked around with this message at 11:36 on Jan 7, 2017 |
# ¿ Apr 18, 2016 07:35 |
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Yes please doc! I may be polishing this up to enter in a competition due 30 April. http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?story=4693&title=Standing+Water.
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# ¿ Apr 19, 2016 02:11 |
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IN and PICK ONE for me please. I'd prefer insane to inane, but either is fine.
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# ¿ Apr 19, 2016 03:01 |
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docbeard posted:Crit Thanks!
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# ¿ Apr 19, 2016 18:27 |
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Confirming I am in with https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j6zg2EA5IBc
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# ¿ May 5, 2016 04:32 |
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While I've always edited stories out where possible, I have had stories published that were originally on here and that I didn't bother editing out.
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# ¿ May 5, 2016 22:25 |
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j6zg2EA5IBc edited out. newtestleper fucked around with this message at 11:37 on Jan 7, 2017 |
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