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sebmojo posted:post the crits ska also sorry for the delays but I figured the toxx had been called in already and just didn't bother to check... CHAIRCHUCKER: Boring Words Are Expendable Good words, worthy of the HM. The insights into the weird inner workings of Sam's mind are particularily interesing. EROGENOUS BEEF: Flush with Cash. The voice of this story does a good job at conveying the urgency of the story. The middle dragged on a bit but the ending was satisfying. IIRC your best dome entries all have a bizarro streak and you're really good at writing bizarro fiction. I enjoyed this quite a bit. STEELTOEDSNEAKERS: An Interrogation. This story is a bit meandering and kind of a mess. Your antagonist is cartoonishly evil and there's no real direction to the story. FLERP: Somewhere This feels really introspective and I think I empathize with the message. It's a tragic story of isolation. Good job. FLERP: Sorry, I'm not flying. You're really good at making me feel sad but in a way that means your words are good. SPARKSBLOOM: Dead Names This is super dark and does a good job with offering a perspective you don't see that often in writing or in Thunderdome. I can feel the stares and hear the quiet snickers of the passers-by and I was seething with rage at them. Evocative but doesn't have the staying power of some of the previous entries. METROFREAK: Heart Improvement A little bit too literal of an interperetation of heartbreak for me. Could easily have been improved with some restraint in the earlier bits building up to a more graphic end. ANIME WAS RIGHT: Not Quite Friends This doesn't do much for me but I think I'm jaded from reading so much today. I'm emotionally drained about a bunch of stuff especially realizing that I completely missed the point of this loving prompt and went about it in a way that was completely wrong both by my interpretation and the intent. I'm just finding this story hard to follow but it is probably not entirely your fault. ENTENZAHN: The Answers You Find and the Questions You Don't A well-needed comedic turn in what has been a stream of soul-crushing sadness that makes writers write. Thank you for that. The humor serves the story well and even though there's a few contrived moments none of it is unforgivable. Thanks for picking up the tone though. I'll have the final 11 up tomorrow... If someone wants to call in my toxx today I'll pay the and hopefully find some more emotional currency with which to properly critique these stories. I feel that maybe not having that called down yet might be part of my ennui might be from the fact that I feel like I'm freeloading. Sorry for sucking and failing poetry week. SkaAndScreenplays fucked around with this message at 09:42 on Jan 24, 2017 |
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In This Week: Maybe I won't gently caress this one up. for the fail last week. SkaAndScreenplays fucked around with this message at 09:42 on Jan 24, 2017 |
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I'm up for being in, or judging. Your call Mr. Joe.
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SkaAndScreenplays posted:In This Week: in
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Sitting Here posted:that I'll have crits from this week and Voidmart 2 up by whenever submissions close next Sunday who watches the watchmen
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Entenzahn posted:who watches the watchmen it's in the mail, madame defarge. Ska's too.
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sebmojo posted:it's in the mail, madame defarge. Ska's too. what are you, some kind of narc
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I'm in, and I'll write it by Friday. If it's not done by Friday, I'll back out. NORMALLY, I'd just wait til Friday to say I'm in, but to get in, I need to have the TV premise. So. There you go. Long story short, what the hell I can do this.
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k, im in.
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Entenzahn posted:who watches the watchmen don't worry i'll be gone soon
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Sitting Here posted:don't worry i'll be gone soon please dont die, dad.
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Sitting Here posted:don't worry i'll be goon
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BeefSupreme posted:also in i guess "A young midwife starts working in an impoverished neighborhood. Her eyes are about to be opened. Wide." "A brash city doctor gets a crash course in country living when she sets up shop in the land of cotton." Chairchucker posted:Ininininin "Surprise! You're a single dad. It's a new world of nighttime feedings -- and the dreaded diaper changes." "Belly up to the Boston bar where everyone knows your name. The laughs flow as freely as the beer." "This psychiatrist deals with neuroses, narcissism and dysfunction every day. And that's just at home." "Audacious interns in over their heads. They practice mischief and medicine while learning the ropes." "Two FBI agents are on the trail of the strange and unexplained. The truth is out there but it's hard to believe." SkaAndScreenplays posted:In This Week: "She's calm and collected on TV, but behind the scenes, there's nothing but drama -- and no end in sight." "No wife, no kids and he works out of his garage. But he has plenty of misery to keep him company." Djeser posted:Put me in coach "Bernie is filled with love for these kids -- tough love. And the more he loses patience, the tougher it gets!" "A young woman's lifelong goal to stay pure is foiled. Now she's got nine months to come up with a new plan." "A writer stuck in the past. A teen with an uncertain future. On a road trip full of firsts, they get a new lease on life." "Dating, career, finding a great taco: It's all hard. But becoming a mature adult is a whole other degree of difficulty." "Two kids, a single mom and a feisty grandma. Three generations under one roof. Their home: hectic. Their hearts: huge." Okua posted:In "High times. Lowlifes. These guys scrape by with the least amount of effort and a few visits to the penitentiary" Uranium Phoenix posted:I'm in "500 years in the future, a ragtag crew travels the universe. They are looking for work but always find trouble." "A former Confederate wreaks destruction across the west in a quest for revenge. There'll be blood on these tracks. " magnificent7 posted:I'm in, and I'll write it by Friday. If it's not done by Friday, I'll back out. NORMALLY, I'd just wait til Friday to say I'm in, but to get in, I need to have the TV premise. So. There you go. Long story short, what the hell I can do this. "A lottery ticket is a lesson in karma. He's a schmuck trying to right his wrongs. He's got a lot of work to do." Obliterati posted:Bring on the slush. "Married, engaged or single, a group of friends unravel the rules of love. But usually they just unravel." "This treacherous, snow-ridden road is a graveyard for semis. Without this cleanup crew, it'd be one paralyzed highway." Fuschia tude posted:in, I am "It's the soccer game they've waited for their whole lives, and nothing's gonna keep 'em from seeing it. Not even death." "Bell-bottoms, pot-smoking and not-yet-classic rock. It's a groovy time to come of age in the suburbs." jon joe posted:in in in in in in in in in in "He'll deliver any package for the right price. If he doesn't know what's inside, it can't hurt him. Theoretically." QuoProQuid posted:k, im in. "His voice? Soothing. His hair? Impressive. His paintings? Simple, beautiful and full of happy little trees."
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seriously feel free to twist these any way you want I don't want them to feel too restrictive
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GenJoe posted:seriously feel free to twist these any way you want I don't want them to feel too restrictive Bringing me on to judge then?
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Chili posted:Bringing me on to judge then? Do you want to enter? I was going to ask on IRC if there was anyone who didn't want to enter but wanted to judge. I'll do that now.
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GenJoe posted:Do you want to enter? I was going to ask on IRC if there was anyone who didn't want to enter but wanted to judge. I'll do that now. grab your judges with both hands and never let them go even if they struggle
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also genjoe is a loser who has become a winner, will the dome recognise that with an avatar?
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