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quote:Jonson passed bad-tempered guardian cleptoraptors on his way to the camp. Crossing a seemingly endless stretch of Middleclass ex-territory on his bicycle, he spotted them crouching among the abandoned villas and houses. Jonson wears a carefully designed scent for them to pick up, and he could see the cleptoraptors raising their antennas, sniffing to deduce if Jonson was a threat or just a mere distraction as they searched for Middleclass loot in the ex-suburb, or for representants from The Arm to harass. Real quick because I'm leaving for work. You have some tense disagreement here 'Jonson wears... he could see...' and that second sentence is hella long. Some people hate that. I don't really mind it but it's definitely something to watch out for. Also 'representants' isn't a word as far as I know, you'd say 'representatives', if that's even quite the right word.
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No, the fiction police will find out and stop you! The fiction police is Doc Klock.
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Mar 5, 2019 01:26
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Sounds a bit like The Littlest Hobo and for that reason I dig it.
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Apr 8, 2019 01:54
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kaom posted:
Honestly so long as every person's dialogue is on a new line, I think you should do whatever lends the most clarity. Clarity is the thing. The only way to know if whatever you're doing is distracting will probably be to ask other people to read it.
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May 30, 2021 23:50
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One time in Thunderdome I got the assignment 'base your story on Tomb of Horrors' - it was lucky, I got the special one - and I had to read the whole thing, never had before. It was fun to write fiction about but I would have imploded trying to run it for a group.
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Nov 25, 2021 21:54
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Marsupial Ape posted:I have a ton of what I believe to be legitimately interesting ideas and I have absolutely no idea how to translate them into the written word, let alone a narrative. This is something I used to be good at and I don’t know exactly how or when, I got in my own way, creatively. It’s incredibly frustrating and makes me feel like a fraud. Just start doing it however badly. Write your ideas down even as bullet points. Write the lovely version as a stepping stone to the good version.
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Nov 15, 2022 04:37
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Marsupial Ape posted:The OP post comes across as incredibly combative and, honestly, unappealing. I’m sure everyone involved is more adult, nonetheless. It’s a sort of thread injoke to make it feel less harsh when someone says ‘I’m sorry mate but your story really is terrible’.
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Nov 15, 2022 11:27
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Sorta tickled by 'oh you think creative endeavour is worthwhile? Guess you're rich'. I'm poor as hell and I learned to paint anyway
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Nov 17, 2022 05:02
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Yeah, it's a snarky expression of concern, not intended to be a pisstake. At least I didn't read it that way.
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Nov 17, 2022 13:46
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Marsupial Ape posted:That’s either low reading comprehension skills or a lack of depth and breadth of literary exposure. Yeah you got em all right, that'll be what it is.
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Nov 17, 2022 23:56
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You could start by seeing what sources are cited in the Wikipedia article about whatever it is, and try tracking those down. Or head to a community that knows about Thing and ask them. Depends what sort of thing you're after.
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Dec 16, 2022 02:22
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Quite a lot of readers genuinely don't really care about prose, or can't tell good from bad. There's no real way to talk about it without sounding like a terrible snob, though. But look how many people read and enjoy Dan Brown. I'm fussy as hell when it comes to prose.
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Jan 16, 2023 00:23
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nah gently caress commas I love his stuff. Though I got told off in thunderdome more than once for my run-on sentences e: talking about Cormac McCarthy
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Jan 27, 2023 23:25
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I don't think you should use a real language to suggest alienness.
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Jan 31, 2023 05:52
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Honestly reading that paragraph I just looked at the text I couldn't read long enough to know I couldn't read it and skipped to the next word I *could* read. It could have been anything.
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Jan 31, 2023 20:56
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Nae posted:Every time you need some dreamlike, unintelligible speech, just find a video of the Sims talking and transcribe their surreal gibberish as best you can. It’s the most perfect ‘not-quite’ language I’ve ever heard. commonts nala?
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Feb 2, 2023 00:05
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samcarsten posted:I feel like an imposter writer because all I write is fan fiction. I mean if you want to write other things then do, but don't stress it imo
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Feb 7, 2023 13:49
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SimonChris posted:https://twitter.com/clarkesworld/status/1625982159856041985 It's a worry but the author of that article doesn't seem to think it's a critical problem just yet.
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Feb 16, 2023 15:31
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Violet_Sky posted:Welp I guess I'm never getting onboard. No reason to assume that. Your stuff is definitely better than the trash the chatbots are spewing. They'll find ways.
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Feb 20, 2023 22:27
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If half the people don't mind it and *you* like it then I say keep it, at least for now.
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Feb 28, 2023 22:51
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I remember during one very dull MST3K movie Tom Servo announced darkly "The plot thinnens!"
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Apr 12, 2023 03:40
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Is it like a brand new medicine that's only available in a couple of places? If it's already being widely used then there wouldn't be one place you could go to and get all of it. Is your story set in modern day? Can you bullshit a reason it's only in one location, like it's super experimental?
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Apr 12, 2023 21:27
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Milkfred E. Moore posted:In his book on writing, JMS had a fun cheat for this. If you are having trouble with a voice or keeping it consistent, he says to just imagine a favourite actor playing the role/character. This is what I always do. Casting the story is so fun. And nobody can stop you putting Jeffrey Combs in everything.
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Jun 24, 2023 00:03
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I mean that's what Jean Auel does for Stone Age civilisation and for some reason I find those almost addictively readable.
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Jul 27, 2023 18:51
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Leng posted:Brb gotta go rewrite the end of my current WIP so EVERYONE can fly. well how many health potions does the protagonist have left?
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Sep 2, 2023 01:00
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Ither posted:I've been trying to write a book since high school. Yay, write that poo poo imo, write the hell out of it
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Sep 7, 2023 20:01
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gently caress yeah. My favourite book is Always Coming Home which is at least two-thirds 'whale facts'.
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Jan 17, 2024 05:22
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Yeah, that sounds like something a proofreader or copy editor can sort out for you. More important to get the writing done.
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Jan 27, 2024 15:40
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I found getting medicated helped me to do creative things. I spend less time in executive function paralysis these days.
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Mirage posted:If y'all don't mind, I have a blurb I've been messing with for so long that I feel like I've lost objectivity. I think I need a few more eyes on it before I begin sending it to agents. Are you intending that people should think of Jamie Oliver? Because people are going to think of Jamie Oliver.
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