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im scared to read this thread im sure im doing none of this poo poo *follows thread title advice*
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# ¿ Mar 22, 2020 05:25 |
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# ¿ May 17, 2024 14:57 |
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if you could rate your dialog on a scale from 1-10 where 1 is realistic af and 10 carries real weight what would you pick and how does that work for you if you say u do both...….. but seriously i'm struggling trying to choose my approach at this juncture
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# ¿ Mar 22, 2020 12:21 |
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magic cactus posted:I have a question: imo you should take that sonic youth quote from goo??? and just flip some of the words around
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# ¿ Mar 22, 2020 12:29 |
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hmm im not sure what that's in response to but (pretension incoming)... the quote reads: "I stole my sister's boyfriend. It was all whirlwind, heat, and flash. Within a week we killed my parents and hit the road." so basically that gets stuck in my head a lot and someone actually referenced it in byob the other day. my point is essentially, and i'll see if I can dig into it a lil, if your paragraph starts off with "it only took a few minutes" it should not take me a bit to read and it should not have much to unpack. like I get it, it's ez pz. inject some flavour into it like man idk. "it wasn't even a thing" would be how some millennial fuccboi would say it. "... hardest part was [whatever] and we snorted xan off each others' chests to put a point on it... we got over it in a haze of [something]..." or "...we lost ourselves in a blur of mindless sex & serial streaming..." if your chars are norms. but what I mean is if your paragraph starts by describing how short and not a big deal something is id better be done reading it in an eyeblink cuz internally I've already moved on haha if you meant from my own writing... ok ill dig some up but I actually make no claims to be v realistic or hold weight, I meant in terms of approach
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# ¿ Mar 23, 2020 17:09 |
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^yea exactly realism (these are rough sketches) quote:"You've looked better." Tinges of concern like eyeshadow on a pale white face. notice um profanity I guess. mild sarcasm. holding weight will prolly be embarrassing to show. k attempting quote:Altha’s lips are charcoal black, sun-kissed. “I know what you nurse. I know it’s torture.” old stuff. notice
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# ¿ Mar 23, 2020 17:39 |
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its cool that weve all mastered the art of writing to objective perfection in this quarantine and no longer need to consult this thread (closes thread, reads more, writes more)
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# ¿ Apr 22, 2020 19:31 |
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lol I'm writing a pzombie too. great minds!!!! I'm cheating by adopting an outer pov tho. My thesis is there would be tells
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# ¿ May 8, 2020 20:05 |
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American Psycho dude is def not a pzombie imo
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# ¿ May 8, 2020 20:06 |
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u might as well just read trainspotting for the sick boy povs
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# ¿ May 8, 2020 20:10 |
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I'm aware of the phrasing but he's clearly just a sociopath. Pzombies aren't driven to violence and sex. I think it's lazy theory crafting to assume they would be. I think sick boy is better example and in context u get to contrast him with a norm. Its really effective iirx Just my op
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# ¿ May 8, 2020 20:26 |
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sure (shutting up after this post) but pzombies want to maintain normalcy. more likely they'd be obsessed w staying static than an external aesthetic of material supremacy. I'm ykno like I don't know everything. But that's how I treat the concept the fact that there's an I in Bateman to be not there is a tell I feel
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# ¿ May 8, 2020 20:34 |
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well magic will be involved. I'm actually re-evaluating plot based on this convo so ty for starting it
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# ¿ May 8, 2020 20:51 |
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General Battuta posted:Also I think the phrase 'blackness enveloped him' is under a fifty year moratorium. It's not your fault, it's just been depleted of all meaning by constant overuse. yea lol. Envelopes is an awkward word especially. Pokemon has it right when their adolescent PC's just black out in active voice also u could chop the paras & use the old Gibson "then [char name] was [actioning] while [exciting context] happens" as openers which he does in every action scene he writes or just avoid action cuz lol if anyone reads books for things happening. books are about feelings and thoughts with skin navigating uncertain emotional terrain and in this essay I will
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# ¿ May 9, 2020 23:22 |
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Screaming Idiot posted:IT GOT DARK
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# ¿ May 10, 2020 11:41 |
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everybody gets dead
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# ¿ May 11, 2020 18:36 |
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gently caress it I'll do it but itll be a skim or I'll read the opening chapters or w/e. a whole novelette is a lot to read lol I don't have pms but im diseascipline @ Gmail dot com
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# ¿ May 24, 2020 19:02 |
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also if if I ever punked anyone for not writing w/ the pathetic excuse of they have a job im sorry lol. I have not written a word each day I've worked. Lit. Get home and pass out if anyone has any Advice on writing Fiction on days u just feel like sleeping off after work plz post up
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# ¿ May 24, 2020 19:13 |
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lol nice tessa v av yea i managed to write half a sentence before work and then churned out some trash before i went 2 sleep. the system works lmao djeser yr av also
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# ¿ May 26, 2020 09:46 |
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nut posted:I am going to do a write today gently caress yea
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# ¿ May 26, 2020 12:32 |
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e: deleted lol it wasnt that bad tho who cares
take the moon fucked around with this message at 15:41 on May 28, 2020 |
# ¿ May 28, 2020 14:23 |
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i have trashed so many books or atrophied them as they say. i think if youre not feeling anything for whatever reason theres no reason to go hard on it its good just to stay in the game plus the feel of starting a new book lol that being said the ms i feel strongest about is my first and its the one that im editing hard rn
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# ¿ Jun 9, 2020 03:40 |
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Djeser posted:"have you tried thunderdome "
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# ¿ Jun 9, 2020 19:35 |
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yea I was thinking about a flippant answer but figured that wasn't really what op???? poster was looking for. Ive never really liked anything I plan out too much starch in the suit you know? different strokes tons of Nobel writing software exists for stuff like that tho, the best stuff free & cloud based so maybe look into that?
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# ¿ Jun 16, 2020 21:08 |
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my fiction advice is dont put in zumbos lol the expanse ot away w/ it cuz it was hardly the everything. but like zumbos are hard no. like.... please dont (i may use them lol)
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# ¿ Jun 17, 2020 14:29 |
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fight fight fight im gonna write today even though im not Long Walking 0_0 Sham bam bamina! posted:I don't understand this at all. A sad pink firework is good, but to flare out sadly isn't? "Flared" and "flared out" are distinct actions, too; in the excerpt, that part of the character's brain burned bright for a moment before exhausting itself. "Flared out like a sad pink firework" is a perfectly decent bit of imagery. yea that criticism made no sense. how can u even use imagery w/o contradictions well im sure u can somehow but whatevs
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# ¿ Jun 21, 2020 01:46 |
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my criticism is like, idk grade school w/e cuz every criticism seems grade school or ivory tower but its a gamble for your chars to be bored. im probably bored if the chars are. also dull or interesting are bad adjectives in the same way beautiful is. make me feel it dont tell me how to feel i like taking every grade school crit tbh. like i flat out just dont use adverbs at all, im interested in what comes out if u just grind all the basic bitch rules in. all but purple prose. purple prose to the ends of the earth & hell also no rules u can play with no blues u can shake them etc i like that everyones weighing in :)
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# ¿ Jun 21, 2020 02:00 |
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i waited for another post so i wouldnt double post but basically i think the best fa next to close the fuckin thread & log off is to find your voice. theres no point in it otherwise. just... use the crits for that. they are a weapon they are not the war all the authors whove survived the years did so cuz they found their voice & nothing else is worth it thanx 4 reading this post
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# ¿ Jun 21, 2020 02:44 |
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ill linguistics major u
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# ¿ Jun 21, 2020 23:31 |
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ultrachrist posted:But I also don't know what the hell the difference between a hare and a rabbit is. never fear hares are dashing rogues and hardened warriors. they say things like 'death on the wind' and 'blood & vinegar' & also speak in old British piker slang for some reason. they tend to gather around the great battle mountain salamandastron and serve under badger lords assembling into legions to protect the southwest from vermin rabbits are prissy lil beezies lol ----------------
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# ¿ Jun 22, 2020 14:22 |
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sorry 4 sig lol posting w/ a fork
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# ¿ Jun 22, 2020 14:25 |
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General Battuta posted:Authority is great once you realize that there is a ton of really important stuff happening right under the protagonist's nose and he's just not catching it. It's a book that trusts the reader a lot and that can be frustrating if you don't trust it too. Pay attention to the chapter titles! ya that whole series is good whatever tho. what even is fiction
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# ¿ Sep 21, 2020 14:48 |
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Sham bam bamina! posted:Learning dialogue from the Left Behind guy is like learning neurosurgery from Walter Jackson Freeman II. lol i distrust authors who post how-to videos when they could be writing more, reading more, closing threads
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# ¿ Oct 3, 2020 03:23 |
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good advice tbh. as a disabled person it sux to see what i deal with treated absurdly wrong in popular fiction & my favourite works are those that manage to display respect, empathy & dare i say show a beauty in the whole thing. not saying that you should strive for cliche & grandiose goals in yr writing but thats my perspective *doesnt affect my functioning atm but it has been a beezy in the past
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# ¿ Oct 8, 2020 01:34 |
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phone post attempt: my windows don't open even after i chip the paint away her windows didn't open, even after (though sounds better here) she'd chipped the paint away im no lexicologist (though technically a humanities specialist) but those sound ok e: the first sentence is irrelevant ig since youre dead set on a past tense thats just how i would say it irl. key is to stick to one tense i believe and not switch it up mid sentence so its like my windows didnt open even after i chipped the paint away e2: now im confused lol. no idea why my two second sentences seem tensed diff but they both sound fine (USER WAS PUT ON PROBATION FOR THIS POST) take the moon fucked around with this message at 17:21 on Oct 9, 2020 |
# ¿ Oct 9, 2020 16:19 |
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Thumbtacks posted:That's helpful advice, thank you! It was kind of a weird week yeah and I didn't get a ton of foodback (this is one of the few weeks where there wasn't individual feedback, the judge was just kinda "most of these were fine, these were the really bad ones and these were the really good ones" which was kinda unfortunate) "really bad one" here there will be there are always crits
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# ¿ Oct 29, 2020 22:13 |
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lol i personally havent but ive joined 2, one at the local library which was a masturbation emporium and a writing group that never did any writing if theyre known for being good tho yea why not try them i suppose. idk what else a writing club should do besides write & crit
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# ¿ Nov 2, 2020 18:42 |
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# ¿ May 17, 2024 14:57 |
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not to be that guy but you might want to check the long walk next month or whatever. ten bux is a good incentive, as is being immortalized on the wall of shame
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# ¿ Nov 19, 2020 21:32 |