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A human heart posted:Isn't a lot of this advice quite biased in favour of extremely formulaic genre fiction narratives with plot and characters as the main focus. like you're spending all this time talking about plot but lots of great books don't have much of a plot or its fairly unimportant? I'm very curious to know which great books you think don't have a plot, because I'm guessing that most of them actually do.
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# ¿ Feb 28, 2017 16:30 |
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# ¿ May 5, 2024 03:48 |
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So this is what people mean when they talk about posting style...
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# ¿ Mar 1, 2017 19:38 |
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Hawklad posted:This for sure. I'd argue it reads even better as Hawklad stomped his foot and pointed to the door. "Get the gently caress out." but they all work and at a certain point it's just splitting hairs
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# ¿ Mar 12, 2017 03:46 |
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Dr. Kloctopussy posted:Well that's definitely not a mandatory way to start a story, soooooooo.... All of those are good, but all of those are old. Using the best openings of the twentieth century only helps so much when you're trying to appeal to the tastes of agents now. Not saying you have to go by the formula, of course, but the industry's changed a lot since Kafka and Asimov were getting their works read.
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# ¿ May 31, 2017 02:02 |
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Dr. Kloctopussy posted:They are classics (and ones I can easily c/p off the internet). Feel free to add some modern examples that you think are more relevant. Sorry I never responded to this. Truth is, I don't really have a response because I don't know what the gently caress I'm talking about. I'm just so frustrated with my own experience of trying to get published that I'm lashing out at any kind of advice from anyone as a way to make myself feel better. You're doing a good job with this thread, so I'm sorry for coming in/making GBS threads on/walking out. Keep doing your best to help people and ignore posters like me
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# ¿ Jun 12, 2017 05:34 |
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cash crab posted:Oh, right, gently caress. I also came here to ask a question. Speaking of FIRST MANUSCRIPT, I was going to start looking for an agent after I finish the second draft. I'm having an issue with query letters, and I am not sure if this is the right place for it. I am having some trouble figuring out the genre of this book, and therefore, which agencies/agents I should target. I understand the sci-fi market is highly saturated, and frankly, my book isn't in line with what most hardcore sci-fi readers would expect to be reading, either from a linguistic or plot standpoint. Also, from a really pedantic perspective, my book is technically "speculative fiction that happens to set in space". How would I explain this to an agency in a way that sounds less airy? You could always try posting the query in here and see what genre people think it is based on your summarization. Note: this will only help if your summary is a decently accurate reflection of the book itself (which ideally it should be).
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# ¿ Jul 21, 2017 18:12 |
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I usually just google for names by ethnicity so I don't end up with Gundam-style random origins like Fareed McGillis, Gym Ghingham, or Tieria Erde
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# ¿ Jul 23, 2017 01:05 |
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After going through the query process with four manuscripts and not getting much interest, I'm wondering how I can approach this from a different angle. For this most recent manuscript, I had a couple of agents go over both my query letter and my first ten pages. I got feedback saying the pages were strong, and both the query and the premise were solid, but I've gotten nothing but rejections since then. Most were forms, but one did write me back to say this: "You write well, and this is such a great idea, so I am absolutely mystified as to why I am not getting that (somewhat magical, always unpredictable) "Yes! This is for me!" feeling. I'm sorry to report that I haven't quite figured that out yet--but if I do think of anything, I'll certainly let you know." While I appreciate hearing I write well (Hell, I'm always happy to take a compliment), I'm not sure how to proceed when the feedback I'm getting is "Looks great, pass." I've run into the same problem with contests, as well. I've had my work featured in a couple, but I've never gotten a bite from an agent off one. I did have a couple of judges who passed say 'I can't help/rep your book but I'll be first in line to buy it', which was nice, but still not super helpful. At this point, I want to network more, but I get this weird feeling in my gut when I see stuff like the ticket price for the local writers convention being $800. I could afford it if I saved up, but spending almost a grand on a chance of meeting someone who might want to see my work and might accept it seems like a real bad idea. Kind of like falling into a gambling hole - you do one con first, then one more because you know this time will be the one to do it, and then ten cons later you're out $8,000 and no better off than where you started. I've also joined some local writers groups, but I've run into issues there, too. Of the groups in my area, it's a mix of either open mic nights (aka poetry slams), 'shut up and write'-style groups where you don't share your work, and hobbiest groups of people who don't have any intention of trying to get published. Those are good for feedback, but they're not so good for helping me bridge the gap between finishing a book and getting someone to look at it. I'm wondering if there's an angle I'm missing here. The only other avenue I've heard a lot is 'write short stories for recognition', but I have yet to produce a single short story I think is worth publishing. I also don't really enjoy reading short stories, so I'd feel like kind of a liar writing them and I think that probably comes through in the effort. If that really is my only path to success, though, I guess I'll have to suck it up and 'git gud'. Anybody have any other suggestions for ways I can approach this? At this point, I'm feeling okay about my writing itself (though I have been working to simply my stories since a goon told me earlier that I need better ideas), but I'm absolutely lost on how to connect with people who could be interested. I've tried nothin' and I'm all out of ideas! EDIT to say that I think I've made a similar to post to this before, so I appreciate you good people all enduring my whining/venting. I know I've just got to stick with it and either it will happen or it won't, but some days are a lot harder than others. FormerPoster fucked around with this message at 20:11 on Aug 24, 2017 |
# ¿ Aug 24, 2017 17:56 |
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MockingQuantum posted:This is what I'm doing and a lot of people are coming out of the woodwork telling me they have had a hard time finding a group with that focus. I just had a friend who runs a writing group ask me to come talk to the group about the process of getting published, and I do not for the life of me understand why she's asking me to do it. You wouldn't want to hear a minor league washout tell you how to get to the major leagues, so why would you want to hear a writer who hasn't been able to get published talk about getting published?
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# ¿ Aug 25, 2017 16:32 |
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I like Dan Harmon's story wheel, but I've struggled with how to apply it for determining pacing. I know he says the pieces aren't all equal eighths, but it seems like the middle/bottom portions take up a much bigger chunk of the story than the wheel would suggest.
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# ¿ Aug 25, 2017 19:31 |
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Stuporstar posted:Ok, but what if your story ends up more like this? If there's nothing to hint at 7 and 8 earlier on in the story, then it's likely to be a pretty unsatisfying ending. A lot can work if you set it up right, though.
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# ¿ Aug 26, 2017 02:40 |
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Safety Biscuits posted:Maybe your writing, on a sentence-by-sentence level, just doesn't stand out enough? Sounds a bit like your problem is that there's nothing really wrong with it, but there's nothing too special about it either. Networking isn't ultimately going to sell your book, you know? Yeah, I know what you're saying, and it's honestly my biggest worry. I think I know how to write something that's technically good, but 'technically good' is something you can figure out with rules and guidance. Making something good stand out as special is a lot harder and there aren't any magic tricks on how to do it. As for the networking part, I hate it and I don't want to do it either, but all the advice in my life is coming from boomers who are probably mad they can't tell me to go knock on the doors of publishing houses with a printed copy of my manuscript. I basically can't have a conversation about anything remotely related to any kind of career without it devolving into 'well have you leaned on your network????' Yeah, I have leaned on my network, but my network is full of thirty-somethings like me who have even fewer connections than I do. Jesus, my network is made of people who are stoked when they can make the rent.
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# ¿ Aug 28, 2017 16:46 |
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That is also true and why I'm not giving up. Maybe one of these days I'll even up my odds and write one of those strong women protags agents all seem to want, but for the moment I'll keep pushing my book with dudes.
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# ¿ Aug 28, 2017 17:15 |
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sebmojo posted:just do a find/replace instant gender swap. That is gonna make things real complicated in a story about a character coming to terms with being a gay man.
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# ¿ Aug 28, 2017 19:35 |
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Okua posted:Here's some venting: Coming up with titles is haaaaard. Stupid Newbie's Big Spooky Fantasy Story There, now you owe me 10% royalties of every book you sell.
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# ¿ Aug 28, 2017 19:45 |
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crabrock posted:here are some fantasy titles i came up with for you: gently caress I really wanna read WIRELESS TREBUCHET and UNITED STEAKS
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# ¿ Aug 28, 2017 20:42 |
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Dr. Kloctopussy posted:Edit: 30 minutes later remembered my working title right now is Amulet of Air Consider jazzing it up with a subtitle like "Amulet of Air: A Good Book, part of the Hell Yeah Fantastical Book Cycle"
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# ¿ Aug 28, 2017 22:23 |
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crabrock posted:it's just all articles, adjectives, adverbs and prepositions now. Jesus Christ, somebody get this man a Nobel Prize for Style fridge corn posted:it's not my intention to write something so obviously dense and obtuse then maybe reconsider your posting style hahahahahahah Extremely good jokes aside, I do see your point. I think it's fair to say that you do come across less experimental prose in genre than you do in 'literary' fiction, but only because people have a tendency to put anything that seems experimental in the literary bucket even if it has elements that would put it under genre. For example, some people think of The Metamorphosis as literary fiction, but it's still a story about a man turning into a bug. A lot of this stuff comes down to both the perspective of the reader and the perspective of the current generation in the publishing community. FormerPoster fucked around with this message at 19:56 on Aug 30, 2017 |
# ¿ Aug 30, 2017 19:52 |
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I wrote the first few pages of my first book on a pad of paper from the office. I've also typed out chapters on my phone. Neither method is exactly fun, but both are better than not writing at all.
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# ¿ Aug 30, 2017 20:39 |
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the old ceremony posted:you all write like shitass balls and one day your novels will float out to sea and be lost Hell, that's honestly better than I was expecting.
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# ¿ Sep 2, 2017 18:21 |
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Burkion posted:Lost stories are better than the ones you can actively read anyways Anything can happen in a story that's written like shitass balls
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# ¿ Sep 2, 2017 21:12 |
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anime was right posted:thats a lot of words for "write more" It's saying more than that, though. Not only is it saying "write more", but it's also saying that writing poo poo is an important part of learning to write well. Producing work you hate isn't a sign of failure; it's an opportunity to figure out why you hate it and work towards something you love. To condense that down to "write more" misses the point, which is that bad work isn't wasted work, but work towards future success. Mirage posted:I tend to think of writing as more like when schoolkids doodle in their books and turn pictures of Washington into a Japanese schoolgirl or something. Is this what the kids are doing now?
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# ¿ Sep 7, 2017 17:59 |
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Xelkelvos posted:Dunno if this was posted in CC somewhere else: http://io9.gizmodo.com/write-a-short-story-about-the-economics-of-the-future-a-1800020162 The prompt is kind of weird because they're asking for a story but it's written like they want an essay instead. Also, they say they want a nuanced critique, but the whole project seems very pro-UBI in general. Is it a critique they want, or an affirmation of the theory? An exploratory essay or a fictional narrative? I'll give it a try because I think it's an interesting prompt, but I won't be surprised if the winners turn out to be glowing non-stories about the greatness of UBI.
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# ¿ Sep 11, 2017 05:52 |
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Burkion posted:If I can honestly ask, how does this synopsis read I'm no expert, so take what I say with a grain of salt, but the one thing that sticks out here is the multiple instances of 'Alex finds herself'. On the surface, this is an issue because it's repetitive, but it's also troubling on a deeper level because it suggests Alex's actions are driven by the plot and not the other way around. Can you rewrite your query in such a way that it shows the choices Alex has to make, or does she not have control at any point in the story? If she doesn't ever have control, you may have fundamenal issues with your manuscript. Both agents and readers are looking for stories where characters' decisions have a meaningful impact on the narrative. They're not looking for stories about people being swept along by the tide. When you're writing a query letter, consider these four points I shamelessly stole from QueryShark: 1) Who is the main character? 2) What does she want? 3) What is keeping her from getting what she wants? 4) What must she sacrifice to get what she wants? That's it. That's what the story is. Unless, I guess, you're doing some crazy literary poo poo where you eschew pedestrian fancies like the traditional narrative arc. It doesn't sound like you're doing that, though, so you and your query should both be able to answer those questions. FormerPoster fucked around with this message at 22:35 on Sep 11, 2017 |
# ¿ Sep 11, 2017 22:24 |
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Burkion posted:That is an excellent point. The answer is a bit complicated because the thrust of the story is Alex gaining the power to actually decide what to do for herself, at least from her POV. But I can definitely rejigger what I have with that in mind. If your manuscript supports what you're saying, then yeah, you're right about the summary giving the wrong vibe. Is Alex the only POV in the story? From what you're saying, it sounds like she doesn't take the most active role until later. If she's not the only POV, is there someone else who moves the story early on?
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# ¿ Sep 11, 2017 22:59 |
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Burkion posted:Without going too much into it It sounds like you've got a lot going on, so I can definitely see why you'd be having trouble explaining the story succinctly. Just out of curiosity, what's your word count?
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# ¿ Sep 11, 2017 23:27 |
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Burkion posted:I misused the word. You know, you can always post a chapter sample here (here being CC in general, not this thread) for critique if you're unsure of what you're sending out. Goons can be pretty ruthless, but you'll probably get as much good advice as you do ball-crushing.
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# ¿ Sep 12, 2017 00:57 |
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sebmojo posted:cut the 'when a clue happens she's brought back line, its implicit in the rest. otherwise that's p solid imo I don't know, change it up like that and you're looking at one long-rear end sentence.
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# ¿ Sep 12, 2017 22:29 |
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I've been knocking around a query letter for my most recent manuscript and I've done a few passes after getting feedback from a couple of agents. In case anyone wants to see what this feedback hell looks like, I'm going to post the iterations I've done and the feedback I've gotten on each, and then finally the draft I put together today based on the most recent round of feedback. Please let me know if I'm on the right track or if I'm still floundering like a loving idiot. Letter Number One posted:It’s not easy to kill a mind reader. It’s even harder to stop them once they’re dead. PERMEABLE MINDS is a 95,000 word science fiction novel that will appeal to readers of Claire North’s The First Fifteen Lives of Harry August or The Rise of Io by Wesley Chu. Agent feedback: 1) This isn't a sci-fi, it's a thriller. The comp titles don't work because of that, so scrap them and change the genre. 2) You're not focused enough on the main conflict: Eduardo is in Gillen's head and is trying to kill him. 3) Does Andrew need to be in this query? 4) It's too long, cut off 5,000 words. I listened to points 1, 2, and 4, but kept Andrew because I thought I knew better. I was a little unsure about the genre change, so I acquiesed on that since I figure I don't know what the gently caress I'm talking about. That got me to pass #2. Letter Number Two posted:Gillen Lynch is a successful man and he’s not going to let his secrets hold him back. Unfortunately, his friend Eduardo not only knows his secrets, but can see every other thought in Gillen’s head. Gillen has spent years planning how to murder his mind-reading friend, so he’s not surprised when his plans go off without a hitch. He manages to kill Eduardo, frame his wife, and flee the city within the span of sixty minutes. Everything is going just the way he planned it - until he starts hearing Eduardo’s voice inside his mind. Eduardo knows exactly how he died, too, and he’s looking for revenge. I sent out pass 2. That got me about 15 form rejections, so I decided to get more feedback. This is what I got: Agent feedback: 1) You're focusing on all the wrong poo poo. Stop wasting time on Andrew and tell us more about Gillen. 2) You're leaving too many details out. I come away from this query with more questions than answers. How does Gillen kill a mind reader? Why does he kill him? 3) The title is really bad. You should change it. I listened to all of those points (finally realizing that yes, Andrew had no place in the query), and tried again, this time with a new title. I also ended up adding like 1,000 words in another editing pass, though that's neither here nor there. Letter Number Three posted:I’m currently seeking representation for my speculative thriller, LISTENER’S REMAINS, which is complete at 88,000 words. Based on your interest in_________, I’m submitting my manuscript for your consideration. Better, right? I thought so. Turns out, nah. Another 15 form rejections. Okay, still not working. Let's get more feedback. Agent feedback: 1) Genre may not be right. It's more speculative than thriller, so try dropping the thriller part and shopping it around that way. 2) It's still too vague. What is Gillen's relationship to Eduardo? What happened to Gillen's dad? Don't worry about spoiling stuff. Agents are not readers, so don't leave us asking too many questions. 3) First paragraph is unnecessary. Cut it and weave the info into the rest of the query. Well, okay, gently caress. Guess I shouldn't have listened on the genre. Or maybe the first agent was right. Who knows? It's probably a sign the book has fundamental problems, but I'm not ready to give up on it just yet, so let's give this query another shot. This leads me to what I have now. Apologies for typos, since I just finished this pass. Letter Number Four posted:I’m currently seeking representation for my speculative fiction manuscript, LISTENER’S REMAINS, which is complete at 88,000 words. Based on your interest in speculative fiction, I’m submitting my manuscript for your consideration. So that's where I stand now. After this round of queries, I'm about ready to call it dead, since I'm at 30+ form rejections and probably another 15 Closed/No Replies. My supply of potential agents is dwindling rapidly at this point, which means this book's chances are just about tapped out. I'm already about 2/3rds of the way through my next manuscript, so I'm at the point where I've mostly divorced myself from this one, but I'd still like to see it through to some kind of conclusion. If anybody has any thoughts on how the query has progressed (or regressed), please let me know, because at this point I'm more or less at a loss.
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# ¿ Sep 13, 2017 23:22 |
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Burkion posted:One thing I might suggest, big laugh considering my own issues with this exact kind of stuff, is lead off with the premise itself. I could try throwing a logline like that in the first paragraph like I did in the first query. People didn't seem to respond to it, or any of the similar loglines I used when I've pitched the book on twitter, but I see what you mean about putting the hook front and center.
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# ¿ Sep 13, 2017 23:50 |
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ketchup vs catsup posted:In the first three Gillen's spent his entire life preparing to kill Eduardo, and in the 4th he decides to do it after finding out the guy reads minds? Which is it? It's both since he found out young and has been planning for years. I didn't think it was necessary to explain the timeline from planning to execution since it didn't seem like the most relevant detail and I'm trying to pare down the extraneous details. Entire life is relative, since they were both teenagers at the time, so to Gillen the time from before finding out might as well not be a thing. Gillen kind of already had an inkling he was gay then, but his sister and Eduardo were already a thing, so he figured he'd bide his time and try and block Eduardo instead of killing. The blocking isn't perfect, though, so eventually Gillen goes back to the tried and truth method of murdering people who make problems in his life. In truth, the time lapse from Gillen finding out to Gillen killing Eduardo is probably less a query issue and more a story issue, which is one of the reasons I think this isn't working on a level beyond the query letter. I'd fight harder for it, but reading the Manuscript Wish List tweets from agents yesterday really drove home how this is not a book anybody is in the market for even if I polish it, so I'm not going to sweat this one too much longer. I still think it's a cool concept and I'm happy enough with the book as a whole, but I don't know that there's a place for it right now in traditional publishing even if I make it perfect. FormerPoster fucked around with this message at 00:29 on Sep 14, 2017 |
# ¿ Sep 14, 2017 00:24 |
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If I cared about the money, I wouldn't be writing, haha. My real worry for self-publishing is that I'd be taking a book that isn't actually any good and wasting time and effort promoting it, when instead I could be working on writing more and making something people want to read. I know the publishing market is its own beast that doesn't necessarily dictate the taste of the general reading populace, but really, if they don't want to read it, why should I think anyone else does? Sure, I've had critique partners and beta readers say they liked it, but a sample size of 10-15 people isn't indicative of the population as a whole. I'd rather trunk this and try again on the next book than keep rolling this boulder up the hill so it can smack me in the face again.
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# ¿ Sep 14, 2017 04:12 |
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CantDecideOnAName posted:Speaking of marketing, the fact that you have to do all the publicity and stuff yourself is the primary reason I haven't looked much into selfpub. I can't sell poo poo. I've got the opposite problem, since I spent 8 years doing online marketing/brand management and now I loving hate the thought of it. Writing was the one thing that got me through a wasted decade of misery in marketing and the idea of going back to the internet marketing guru routine as part of writing makes me want to die. I know that I'll have to market myself online even if I do get traditionally published, but Jesus, at least then I can share a little of the burden. Doing it all on my own would be brutal.
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# ¿ Sep 14, 2017 06:22 |
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fridge corn posted:whats a good resource for culturally ambiguous names for characters? the story im writing doesn't take place anywhere specific and i don't want my readers to think it does but i definitely don't want a bunch of dumb white people names You don't want dumb white people names, sure, but how about you use some of these really good white people names?
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# ¿ Sep 14, 2017 19:31 |
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It's your story, don't be afraid to let foxes gently caress the way you want them to.
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# ¿ Sep 15, 2017 15:17 |
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Stuporstar posted:What do ya'll do when you notice you're using a particular word too much? I keep shoving "especially" into my sentences, can't think of any word that works better. I finally checked the thesaurus, and not a single word in there has the right emphasis or works in the same context. It's driving me crazy. I find a new favorite word and switch one addiction for another. That's not a joke. It's a real bad habit :/
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# ¿ Sep 16, 2017 06:50 |
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CantDecideOnAName posted:As Mark Twain once said, "Substitute 'drat' every time you're inclined to write 'very;' your editor will delete it and the writing will be just as it should be." Seems is another big hedging word a lot of people could stand to eschew, myself included. It doesn't seem like it at first (there's that seem again! but writing and speech have a lot of differences. The way we're trained to talk to each other, we can intentionally put distance between ourselves and our actions/who we're talking to so we don't have to shoulder the responsibility of every action. Writing is different because you're supposed to make it as up close and immediate as possible (at least, in this current literary climate). If you don't believe me, go look over work emails at whatever company you're at (or school emails if you're not working). People who don't want to be called on their bullshit will cling to passive voice and distancing phrases like they're the lone buoys in an ocean of personal responsibility. It's not a great habit for communicating, but it's safe when you care less about effective communication and more about keeping your job.
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# ¿ Sep 16, 2017 20:40 |
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NaNo is the closest I'll ever feel to being a regular gym-goer the week after New Years. I don't see why you need a special event to write a book, just write a book. drat.
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# ¿ Sep 20, 2017 05:59 |
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MockingQuantum posted:Thanks for the response, this is really helpful. I think I'm having exactly the problem you're talking about, where I have a couple of scenes or a mood or beats that I want in a story, but lack a larger context for them. I think additionally I have the problem that I really want to write horror, which tends to be so mood dependent, so I get wrapped up in trying to make the story ~*spooky*~ that it doesn't work on a basic storytelling level. I obviously don't know how to write great horror, but I think that may need to come after figuring out how to write a great anything. I don't know poo poo about horror, so this may be bad advice, but it seems to me like the key is to figure out your main character first, and then figure out what horror is to them. What's scary/creepy to you may not work if the characters aren't moved by it and vice versa. Make sure their horror aligns with the horror of your story and you should be in a good place.
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# ¿ Sep 20, 2017 17:08 |
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# ¿ May 5, 2024 03:48 |
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After The War posted:There will be people there of all experience levels - not only in writing skill, but the range of their interaction as well, so be ready for that. We had just finished up a "how to get better" panel where every panelist siad "you're going to start off lovely, just keep at it" in one way or another, and were taking questions. One guy stood up and said "You way we all start off bad, but I shared my first story with the 1632 fan community and they said I was great, so what do you say about that?" I really want to read this guy's story.
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# ¿ Sep 21, 2017 18:15 |