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Hi critique thread! I wrote a lot of fiction when I was younger and then got ground down by academic and business writing. Thought I'd give fiction a try again this year and I just finished my first short story in about 17 years. I think I'm just looking to figure out how to work through some of my weaknesses. Things like dialogue and character voice. I still read a lot so I'll do my best to provide helpful feedback as well. Here's my story, all 6900 words of it. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FODMAjpHdotUvltpe0qKmtMRqUVz4m91kOdL_EaZU2o/edit?usp=sharing I don't know if a line-by-line critique is necessary. I think I'm mainly dissatisfied with the car ride, and the final setting at the end with the tunnel/cave system. I think it's unintentionally disorienting and I'm not sure how to describe it clearly while portraying the character's confusion. While I was writing it I was trying to remember how Ballingrud communicated things in the crevasse story from North American Lake Monsters. Thanks in advance, I've also joined the thunderdome discord.
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ultrachrist posted:Good work getting back to writing after 17 years. a friendly penguin posted:Hi and welcome back to fiction writing! Thank you both for the thoughtful critiques, I really appreciate them. I just didn't have the energy last week to return to it and give it a big structural edit. I'm going to dive in a bit this evening, hopefully.
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