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Stuporstar posted:I’ve finally finished what I hope is the last major revision of a novel I’ve been working on for years, and I’d like some impressions from outside my writing group on the opening chapters. Once the story gets going, Duran's voice is a lot of fun and the setting is interesting enough that I would've happily kept reading past the pages provided, but I think the prologue is doing you a real disservice. A character we don't know yet thinking in abstract terms about events we haven't seen is really hard to get a grip on. I almost stopped reading out of fear the whole story would be that vague, but once you get past it, the prose is grounded and engaging. Without knowing more about where things go, it's hard to comment on false expectations. What are you hoping to do with the series? If you're writing for fun or to self-publish then ignore me, but if you're planning to pursue traditional publication then having the full five book series written before you've even queried the first one is at best going to be a waste of your time - the books are likely going to change in editing to the point the sequels will have to be rewritten - and at worst going to put agents and editors off.
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