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newts posted:Hi thread. Can I get some crits on my blurb? It’s been through a few rounds of crits from my writing group, and a little workshop. I am mostly happy with it (as happy as one can be about your own blurb, I suppose). Anyway, the book is very close to being done, and I’m thinking about all the bells and whistles: cover, blurb, series name, etc. Would really appreciate any thoughts. I feel like you’re using too many “weak” words. “Pretty, boring" and so on. I think you can afford to punch it up a bit here, a blurb is supposed to capture the reader as quickly as possible. Also the concepts, the info you're trying to convey, sometimes feels too smushed together and other times not informative enough. Hmm, I did a bit of a write-over, if that’s ok. BTW You meant “new ghost” as in the bloke just died, not newly arrived at Parker’s door, yes? quote:Run away to a tiny coastal town. Leave the past in the past. A fresh start.
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# ¿ Jan 24, 2023 07:49 |
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# ¿ May 14, 2024 08:48 |
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A tiny bit of thread necromancy so that I may request feedback on the blurb for my second book. This would be a follow up to All In should you have seen it mentioned in other threads. Thanks in advance. quote:Xenia Findlay despises her new life in the sleepy town of Porter Valley. After tragedy tore her from her home in Los Angeles, she was taken in by a Great-Aunt she hardly knows. In spite of this kindness, Xenia’s miserable, alone and bullied. Just as she’s ready to succumb to her grief, she wakes one morning to find that everything she knew about the world was wrong.
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# ¿ Aug 14, 2023 21:02 |
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Good point. Thanks, I appreciate the feedback. Ok, power armor for ghosts? Clicking that link now... Edit: Tore through it. Enjoyable little read! I left my comments in the google docs itself. CaptainCrunch fucked around with this message at 00:09 on Aug 19, 2023 |
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