Daily Poetry Thread 2K16: so i've been working on my freeform sonnets

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The Something Awful Forums > The Finer Arts > Creative Convention > Daily Poetry Thread 2K16: so i've been working on my freeform sonnets

GREAT SATAN: Aug 1, 2014; by Fluffdaddy

LargeHadron posted:

Very nice, Leonard Cohen.

You Tried to Change Your Name

You tried to change your name
But every other detail of life
Was, and still is,
Exactly the same

I Grew a Beard

I grew a beard for two years
When I looked in the mirror
After shaving it off
I saw a face two years older

If I hadn't grown a beard
And I looked in the mirror
Would I see a face
That looked two years younger?

I read your poems. I haven't critiqued a poem in like four years now (gently caress), so I'm not even going to try to be all fancy about what I say right now. I like that you posted two together. They are very similar in theme, I guess. I Grew a Beard is the better of the two. You Tried to Change Your Name might be more of a facebook post or something, but this I Grew a Beard has that last line which caught me off guard.

I know that the above was useless but I'll try harder has time goes on. If people post poems.

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