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In drawing, every contour you add to someone's face adds five years. The extra detail complicates the picture, making it harder to read what's important and what's not. You have to learn how to use just a few lines to capture the important characteristics, while avoiding all the irrelevant detail. I feel like this is applicable to writing, somehow.
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# ¿ Feb 4, 2017 18:22 |
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22 Eargesplitten posted:Oh, hey, one of the first writing questions in a new thread. How would you show rather than tell someone noticing that someone had changed since they last saw them? In terms of demeanor, not physically. The last time they saw them was before the story started. Think about this: what does it feel like when someone's changed? It's like they're doing the wrong thing, or it's like everything they do becomes hightened and evidence that something's different. Have the point of view character dwell on what they're doing in between sentences, maybe. On some level you will have to point out to the reader that they're not supposed to be like this, but it could be like "she tapped the menu on the table and grinned, wider than i'd ever seen her grin." While that 'than i'd ever seen her' feels blunt, it's doing a couple of things. First, it's not dancing around the issue. The reader knows what's up. Something's different Second, it makes the whole sentence about what's different. And third, it's in reference to a physical thing. It's not saying that she's more energetic than before, it's saying that she's tapping her menu and grinning now, and that's strange. It's concrete detail instead of an idea.
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# ¿ Feb 17, 2017 03:02 |
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SurreptitiousMuffin posted:HEY GUYS LET'S MAKE A HUMAN HEART HAPPY, BUT I ALSO HAVE A REAL QUESTION I really didn't like Triburbia but that had less to do with the collected-vignette structure and more to do with the fact that everyone was rich and unpleasant. It did generate some sort of forward momentum through a few plot threads that were expanded on as the novel progressed, not in the sense of a single narrative thread but in providing different viewpoints and adding context, until by the end I felt like I had a full concept of the events from different angles. Honestly, you could probably get a shambling simulacrum of something like that by writing a bunch of short stories and vaguely tying them together with callbacks.
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# ¿ Mar 1, 2017 03:21 |
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A human heart posted:I can't really think of many writers off the top of my head this applies to. It often tends to be the opposite, where a writer's earlier works are more experimental and they write more conventionally(as far as that's possible) later on. While I can see this trend applying to writers' published works (sometimes, at least), it's certainly not the case for an amateur writer, and that's what most people on this forum are. Maybe The Name of the Rose is Umberto Eco's most experimental novel, but it's not the first thing he ever wrote. Very few authors' first published novels or short stories are going to be the first piece of fiction they ever wrote. A human heart posted:I'd be more interested in this thread if there was more about prose style, more focus on language. That's where everything else comes from after all. The difficulty here is that everyone's going to have their own style, and it's hard to talk about it in a purely theoretical context without examples. And we do have a thread for posting and getting feedback on style and language, The Fiction Farm. Aside from that, be the change you want to see in the world. If it's something you want discussed more, bring up questions about it and people will talk.
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# ¿ Mar 6, 2017 04:05 |
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For a bit more explanation on dialogue tags: 'said' and 'asked' are two magic words in that they vanish when you read them. (This effect is broken, by the way, if you use adverbs or try to join clauses, e.g., 'said softly' or 'said, swinging his sword'.) They're so simple and ubiquitous that they don't read as prose, they read as information. They are important because the focus the reader on the dialogue, not on the tags. The problem with fancier dialogue tags is not that they're bad in and of themselves. It's that they're often redundant, and they call attention to themselves, which makes the redundancy all the more obvious. Here's the rule of thumb: A dialogue tag should only add information not available through context.* quote:"Are we ready?" I asked. I don't need 'replied', because there's nothing else this could be other than a reply. quote:Romeo embraced Juliet, pressing his lips against her neck. I don't need 'cooed', because I would expect that to be spoken that way anyway. quote:"How are you feeling, honey?" Mae's mom asked. I do need 'lied', because without it, that line means something different. quote:Andrew grimaced. "I'm going to need more time on the project." I do need 'sighed', because if his boss had said it, it would have conveyed a different meaning. Compare this to, say, ""I'm exhausted," he sighed", where the same tag doesn't add as much information. I can expect someone exhausted to be sighing. *Yes, technically 'asked' adds information available through context (since it usually follows a question) but to a lot of readers, 'said' following a question reads strangely and 'asked' shares the same vanishing ability as 'said'. Djeser fucked around with this message at 06:12 on Mar 6, 2017 |
# ¿ Mar 6, 2017 06:09 |
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Writing is first and foremost a communication of ideas from the author to the reader, and one of the most persistent problems amateur writers have is prose getting in the way of their ideas. This applies across all genres and styles. Effectively conveying ideas is difficult. A lot of the advice people give (especially in this thread, or in places like Thunderdome) is meant to develop the writer's ability to effectively convey their ideas. There's nothing inherently wrong with a stylistic choice, but a super common mistake amateur writers make is focusing on their stylistic choices to the detriment of conveying their ideas. This is something I did for a while when I started out writing. I was so concerned with these weird flourishes I could do (intercut paragraphs with no punctuation! write like a fake textbook! do it all in a transcript style!) that I was spending more time on the style of my writing as opposed to the content of it. Now, style is important. But it's not more important than content, and that also applies across genres. Something plain and meaningful is better than a flashy nothing. I'm not pulling this out of nowhere or reading it off my Code of Hammurwritebi, by the way. This comes from having spent like eighteen weeks judging amateur fiction written by goons. Prose style is an important part of writing, but it's something you discover as you build your skills, it's not the first thing to ever work on. It'd be like trying to learn a drawing style first, before you have a solid grasp on form or texture or anatomy. I can sympathize a lot with showbiz_liz cause there's a lot of weird ways writing gets taught between high school classes that focus just on essays, electives meant to broaden your vocabulary, and college programs run by professors with grudges so old the grudges themselves have tenure. Djeser fucked around with this message at 23:22 on Mar 9, 2017 |
# ¿ Mar 9, 2017 20:11 |
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an embarrassment of trolls
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# ¿ Mar 10, 2017 02:54 |
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Ironic Twist posted:Can everyone share their own strategies for writing dialogue? Besides stalking/wiretapping For me writing a person's dialogue is a bit like playing badminton but you can't see the other player, only the birdie. Each person's line is based off their thoughts and what the other person's said, so it comes out as a back and forth flow. Each person has the ideas in their head that they're trying to convey, and each line is taking what the person said before and wrapping that back around to their ideas.
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# ¿ Mar 11, 2017 02:36 |
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Chairchucker posted:Here's some fiction: sebmojo is a good writer present tense is a flashy, distracting fad in fiction
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# ¿ Mar 17, 2017 01:54 |
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you will to have ought been being regretted having said that
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# ¿ Mar 17, 2017 02:09 |
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anime was right posted:how about this, how do people feel about information density? is it cool to thrust people into buzzword city so long as it makes sense as you continue to read? do you think its better to introduce elements slowly at the cost of lengthening your pace? As long as the reader is never in the dark about something relevant to the plot, then it's fine. You can look at something like His Dark Materials or the Abhorsen trilogy, where they've got a lot of thick worldbuilding, but it's all presented at a rate at which by the time something becomes relevant to the plot, the reader understands it. I actually personally like the effect that a flood of information can give you (when done right) but that's because I'm generally a fan of hyperreality in fiction and media. See: the avatar someone gave me because I loving love the Speed Racer movie. I think it probably varies too when you're talking about short stories versus longer works. I've seen a lot more in novels asides where they'll go and kind of flood you with information and then later on tease bits of it out that had more meaning, where in a shorter story most of what you're going to be accomplishing with a flood of information like that is creating a sense/image of something more than setting up future plot points. Probably the easiest way to dump information in without slowing down pace too much is to put the reader in the viewpoint of someone who's competent and let the internal monologue lead an explanation of the practical aspects. I remember in The Gods Themselves there's a part that's like a huge exploration of a tri-gendered alien society and Asimov basically explains it through the perspective of the viewpoint characters going through their lives.
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# ¿ Mar 17, 2017 07:20 |
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that was actually a joke, i really liked the present tense in Angelmaker and it never bothered me, even during the part where the girl had sex on a bed bolted to train tracks so she could get train orgasms
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# ¿ Mar 21, 2017 05:32 |
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Generally in prose I'd spell everything out, including numbers unless they're unwieldy to write in prose. State Street, and fifty-five, but 1849. The only time I wouldn't do that is if you're quoting a piece of written text that did use the abbreviation.
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# ¿ May 8, 2017 00:03 |
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The west coast has a bunch of features that all contribute to the addition of an article in front of highway numbers. Since the states are much larger than the east coast, a highway is much less likely to change number, so it makes sense to refer to 'the X' as a highway instead of 'well it's 218 in new york and that becomes 33-west in connecticut and the Palisades Parkway if you go toward new jersey'. (There's also much less likely to be multiple routes with the same name.) Plus, since the numbering system starts in the south west and counts up, it means the west coast gets a lot of simpler numbers. If you've got I-5 you might start calling it The 5, but if you've got I-96 it's a bit harder to make the jump to articles. this has nothing to do with fiction but a lot to do with roads
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# ¿ May 12, 2017 02:41 |
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self-pubbing your erotica counts as getting published right
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# ¿ May 12, 2017 06:38 |
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Any character you write is going to have a bit of your own narrative voice to them, because you can't get entirely outside of your head when you write. If you're having trouble distinguishing them from your normal narrative voice though, maybe try coming up with a couple mental rules for how they sound different? You'll want them to tie back into some aspect of your character so they're not just doing it to sound different. It could be anything from a simple preference for vocabulary or forms of speech to more complex personality traits. I recently read a novel where all the characters had a certain energetic wordiness to them because that was how the author wrote, but each character did have their own mannerisms within that--like a lawyer who would always be outwardly courteous but also very presumptive, so when he talked to other people he'd start genially telling them what he thought was in their best interest to do. So I guess the real question you should answer for yourself is what actually is your character's voice? Like, if they want something from someone, how would they ask for it? If they're trying to convince someone, how would they do it? How would they describe themselves? How would they want to come off to other people?
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# ¿ May 23, 2017 18:33 |
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Wheat Loaf posted:Hope that this is an appropriate place to ask a question: can anyone explain the difference between an homage and a pastiche to me? Wikipedia, Pastiche posted:A pastiche is a work of visual art, literature, theatre, or music that imitates the style or character of the work of one or more other artists. Unlike parody, pastiche celebrates, rather than mocks, the work it imitates.[...] Pastiche can also be a cinematic device whereby filmmakers pay homage to another filmmaker's style Wikipedia, Homage posted:Homage (/ˈhɒmᵻdʒ/ or /ˈɒmᵻdʒ/) is a show or demonstration of respect or dedication to someone or something, sometimes by simple declaration but often by some more oblique reference, artistic or poetic. [...] See Also: Pastiche Homage is intentionally dedicating a piece of art to something, pastiche is an imitation of something in celebration of it. You can create an homage through pastiche. Homage is creator intention, pastiche is creative device.
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# ¿ Jun 3, 2017 22:39 |
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Sociopastry posted:Soue Ie gwt Scrivner forr writng nd sso ftar Ie louve itt, bott I'va gotue aa bint gof aa probalem- itt keps underlnng evry snigle wordde ats mispelted, noo mattre waht. Gogole's naot helpng mee. Sorry, dunno how to help you
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# ¿ Jun 8, 2017 17:18 |
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Sociopastry posted:what're the main differences between a western and a southern gothic? besides the obvious more rooty tooty point n shooty of a western, I mean. I'm writing what I'd tenatively call a southern gothic, but other people are calling it a supernatural western. Not sure what the gently caress to label it. I feel like I should have some kinda label on it, for when I finally get the drat thing done so I can pitch it to the right publishers The broad themes of a western are more about Humanity and The Wilderness, whether that's literal wilderness or metaphorical wilderness where the law doesn't reach. Southern Gothic is about aging authority and elegant facades. In a western, authority comes from practical power, while in a southern gothic, authority comes from tradition. The way it divides up in my mind is that a western is new/untamed/wild while southern gothic is old/rotting/ornate.
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# ¿ Jun 15, 2017 21:05 |
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FunkyAl posted:Sheriff Niles - A Cheers/Frasier Expanded Universe Fanfiction
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# ¿ Jun 16, 2017 04:40 |
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why did you need to use a japanese word for the thing
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# ¿ Jul 3, 2017 02:42 |
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"It's soft sci-fi focusing on plot and theme" or something. I don't know what your book actually focuses on or to be honest what it is that sci-fi readers want aside from a big ships that are guns in space
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# ¿ Jul 21, 2017 07:21 |
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20000-names.com is good too
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# ¿ Jul 23, 2017 00:20 |
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i call him branderson sanderson because anything else is like a melody that doesn't resolve
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# ¿ Aug 6, 2017 14:03 |
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That's a good reason why to ask in the self-pub thread!
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# ¿ Aug 14, 2017 14:14 |
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Do it anyway, now it's postmodern
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# ¿ Aug 28, 2017 19:39 |
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yes
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# ¿ Aug 29, 2017 21:35 |
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good question btw
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# ¿ Aug 29, 2017 21:36 |
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fridge corn posted:im only asking cuz ive got an idea for a novel i want to write but when i think about the premise of it and how i want to write it, it sounds very much like a kind of book that some other authors ive read would have written. authors with very distinctive styles. It's not something to really worry about until you start writing it. Two different authors can have the same outline and same goals in mind, and end up with two completely different stories, simply because they're different people drawing from different experiences when they write. If you're worried about unconsciously mimicking the prose style of the writers you're drawing inspiration from, that's something to look for in editing, where you'd be able to pull out and revise anything you feel is too close to mimicry. Right now, this sounds like the sort of excuse your brain will make to keep you from writing, along the lines of 'but I can't write it until it's perfect'. Every author, whether consciously or unconsciously, is using elements of style picked up from other people. Are you worried that your personal voice as a writer isn't strong enough? That's something I'm often concerned about, because my voice varies a lot between the pieces I write, but again, that's something you can sort out in editing. One of the major things I end up doing when I edit is trying to work everything back into a cohesive style.
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# ¿ Aug 29, 2017 23:56 |
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Yeah, the thing you're describing is just like good writing, which isn't something that's specific to literary fiction. There is a lot of poorly written genre fiction, but there is plenty of well-written genre fiction too. Anyway my advice there is still the same, style is something to worry about once you're going back and editing your drafts so don't let it be the thing that stops you from putting words on the page.
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# ¿ Aug 30, 2017 19:50 |
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MockingQuantum posted:I'm finally over the bump of writing regularly, which is great. I no longer feel like the barrier is actually getting words to paper. But writing regularly has kind of left me realizing how lovely my writing is quality wise. That's fine, because I feel like a lot of mechanical stuff I can learn to improve, but I feel like I have a deeper problem where my ideas and story concepts don't really go anywhere. They're all pretty half baked and lack much in the way of impact or arc or anything. I alway run with an idea that's intrigues me, then when it doesn't really take off, I tell myself "I'll fix it in the edit" but it doesn't get appreciably better, really. Part of learning to write is learning how to take an idea full circle and make it satisfying to read. So no, you're not struggling with something other people haven't struggled with. A lot of what you're talking about could be down to planning. I know sometimes I'll have an idea for a story in my head, and I know a couple of the beats I want it to hit, and the general shape of it, but I just can't work it into a satisfying shape on the page. Usually that's because I'm thinking about a vague mood I want the story to have, instead of focusing on the character/theme/conflict. Working on stories that have relatively simple plots can help you wrap your head around the mechanics of making something that wraps up to satisfying whole. That's why I'm pretty fond of pulp stories, especially for writers still developing their skill. The plot is simple, but you get practice taking a story through a complete arc and concluding it. Alternatively, you could try spelling out for yourself what you want the structure of your story to be in the beginning. Not every story needs to have the standard "motivation, conflict, resolution" structure, but it's much easier than trying to get experimental with your narrative when you're still trying to figure out how to write effectively. Start with a motivation: what does the character want to have, do, or achieve? Then the conflict: what's in their way? Finally, the resolution: what do they do to overcome that conflict, and is it enough? It's a straightforward structure, but it works if you want to write a story with a satisfying ending.
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# ¿ Sep 20, 2017 10:11 |
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brag to your writing group about becoming a meme on the something's awful creative commons forum
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# ¿ Sep 21, 2017 18:51 |
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Hungry posted:I know that during editing I can/should shed 10-15% of each scene Is this based on personal experience or what? I'm asking because for me, my stories tend to grow when I edit them, so if this is a rule you're trying to apply to your own writing, it may just be that for this story (or just for this scene) that the rule doesn't work.
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# ¿ Oct 18, 2017 17:57 |
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Simbyotic posted:Can someone explain to me why I lost this last TD? Apart from some awful punctuation issues, and a weird phrases or two - I shouldn't have posted it that early, I've learned my lesson, - I actually quite like my little story. A critique for you Simbyotic posted:The Amazing Victor Steele Amusement Park Coming to the end of this, my big question is: what's the point? That's a rhetorical question, don't answer it. But here's your plot: Boy wants to run away from home. Finds amusement park in forest, wants to go on a ride. Can't because his parents aren't there. Leaves and gets beaten by his parents. When I say 'what's the point' I'm not saying that the story's got to have Something to Say or a moral or whatever. I'm asking why is this worth telling? What am I supposed to get out of this? A story's point could be rollicking action or an intriguing character or an shred of raw emotion, but I'm not getting any of that from this. It feels almost like a morality tale with no moral at the end besides, I dunno, 'don't run away?' If this was supposed to be tragic, there's no catharsis, no chance for a release. If it's supposed to be dramatic, the ending comes out of left field and stops any sort of dramatic tension. If it's supposed to be funny, I don't get the joke.
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# ¿ Oct 24, 2017 20:06 |
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There's no rule about where to put your attribution for a sentence. You can do it before, after, in the middle of the sentence, or even not at all if you're feeling cheeky and you think the reader can follow along anyway. It's worth noting that I've also seen books where they broke the 'new paragraph for every speaker' rule. (Not that they were great books to begin with.) Still, any rule in writing is one that you can break if breaking it improves what you're trying to convey.
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# ¿ Nov 1, 2017 16:08 |
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I managed 30k in one week once but my job is like eight hours of actual work per week. It's not a high-paying job, I'm just underemployed.
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# ¿ Nov 2, 2017 20:40 |
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The question for getting traffic is where are people coming from? Is your story being posted to a community where people would go and read it? Is it somewhere that you could search and find it? Do you have an online following somewhere? If you're starting from scratch and not really posting it anywhere, it'll take a while to gain traction. Like, possibly years of consistent work. That's how it goes with a ton of projects, whether writing or videos or podcasts or what. You don't have to promote yourself (I never really have) but it's a slow thing unless you're doing some kind of networking.
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# ¿ Dec 20, 2017 23:09 |
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Tips for editing: Read it out loud. If it doesn't sound good coming out of your mouth, fix it. Look out for sentences that should be split apart. If two parts of your sentence are unrelated, they ought to be two separate sentences. Vary sentence structure. Make sure you're not doing "subject verbed, verbing an object" over and over again. Look for things that don't fit your voice. Would a medieval monk use "prank"? Would a modern punk use "perhaps"? Change the font. This is strangely helpful for seeing your words in a new light. I usually write in whatever the default is (Arial or Calibri) and then change it to something more 'bookish' (Garamond, Georgia, etc). Rewrite if you have to. Sometimes, I'll just take a paragraph and write a new version of it right there. Sometimes I'll do that for most of the story. If something feels boring either make it interesting or cut it out.
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# ¿ Jan 16, 2018 18:02 |
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I frequently use beta readers for my stories (not for TD, I don't need the cabal leaving any crow heads in my bed) and I never bother giving them the rough draft, because by the time my second draft rolls around, everything will have changed so much that the feedback I got would essentially be worthless. If it makes more sense, think of it this way: you don't want to make your beta readers read something before you yourself have read it. And when you're writing it, you're not reading it. So make sure that you give anything you're working on one whole reading yourself before you pass it off to someone else. (Novels are a bit of a different beast because of their size, but still, you'll probably catch so many things to fix, add and remove on an edit pass on your own that it's not worth getting beta readers until then.)
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# ¿ Jan 18, 2018 13:36 |
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Dr. Kloctopussy posted:Eh, we've all been there at some point... I too find that my readers are less sympathetic after I puke on their dick.
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