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Whiny teens, a questionably named band, this has all the makings of a dystopia movie franchise now change the setting to have a ton more barbed wire and everybody should be hunting with dynamite tipped bows and trying to have sex in the blindspots between state sanctioned spy cameras.
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Zippy the Bummer posted:the only people who want to read that are other angsty teens, and they have a wealth of blogs on the internet exactly about that (for free). basically change the story entirely. No, I'm not doing any of that. I was also that angsty in my mid 20's and the stupid thing is 3 loving dollars. just don't buy it at all then. it's not for you, clearly. it's for people that just plain hate other people and everyone and everything while admitting that they are just a whiny human being. which is exactly what i am. (USER WAS PUT ON PROBATION FOR THIS POST) (USER WAS BANNED FOR THIS POST)
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Mar 25, 2020 02:18
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If you write a book only for you then it's not really a book its a diary. And itd be rude to read your diary.
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wesflarger posted:basically change the story entirely. No, I'm not doing any of that. I was also that angsty in my mid 20's and the stupid thing is 3 loving dollars. just don't buy it at all then. it's not for you, clearly. it's for people that just plain hate other people and everyone and everything while admitting that they are just a whiny human being. which is exactly what i am. You could always work on not being that way
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Mar 25, 2020 02:23
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wesflarger posted:basically change the story entirely. No, I'm not doing any of that. I was also that angsty in my mid 20's and the stupid thing is 3 loving dollars. just don't buy it at all then. it's not for you, clearly. it's for people that just plain hate other people and everyone and everything while admitting that they are just a whiny human being. which is exactly what i am. lol, you're terrible.
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Mar 25, 2020 02:28
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wesflarger posted:I wrote a book. Yeah, I'm advertising it here. I hope this isn't ban-able offense. You don't even have to but it ($3) if you have a Kindle subscription it's free. If you read it, let me know how much you loving hated it. i completely forgot that this was supposed to be the purpose of the thread. OP, your book sucks horse cock. You are a terrible writer and will almost certainly never find success as one. Your book is a weak dribbling piss into a sea of liquid poo poo. If your book was a person and I met them on the street I would throw a wasp nest at their head
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DeadFatDuckFat posted:We should have a gbs quarantine creative writing thread imo. now tTHATS what the gently caress I'm TALKING ABOT
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Mar 25, 2020 02:35
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wesflarger posted:I legitimately am very entertained by it 
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wesflarger posted:I'm married with kids
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guitartorch posted:now tTHATS what the gently caress I'm TALKING ABOT Make a thread and I will post something in it
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Mar 25, 2020 05:30
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lol rip again op
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Mar 25, 2020 12:08
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drat. This wes guy just can't catch a break
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Mar 25, 2020 12:09
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I wonder what gender identity he'll use as a slur to title his next video.
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Mar 25, 2020 12:22
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When/If OP returns how about we show him a much better self-published book that blows his out of the water in comparison? 
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Mar 25, 2020 15:05
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Pick posted:Congrats! Every creative endeavor should be celebrated. Be proud of yourself!
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Mar 25, 2020 16:19
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Even Sausage Party starring Seth Rogan?
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this thread is a mighty fine skeebap ba doo diddly if you ask me
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Applewhite posted:Even Sausage Party starring Seth Rogan? It has Heart....
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Who What Now posted:If you write a book only for you then it's not really a book its a diary. And itd be rude to read your diary.
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wesflarger posted:basically change the story entirely. No, I'm not doing any of that. I was also that angsty in my mid 20's and the stupid thing is 3 loving dollars. just don't buy it at all then. it's not for you, clearly. it's for people that just plain hate other people and everyone and everything while admitting that they are just a whiny human being. which is exactly what i am. Lol. Anyway, there are tons of books written about being an angsty, misunderstood teenager/young adult that are just as authentic as yours, but are better-written. You can revise or rewrite your book and keep it authentic, it's not a betrayal to yourself or or your work. "To Kill a Mockingbird" started out as a entirely different novel, after all.
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Mar 25, 2020 23:30
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bradzilla posted:It sucks poo poo op 
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Mar 25, 2020 23:36
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Mar 25, 2020 23:39
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I am literally quarantine in my house so gently caress it I might get this stupid thing and do a dramatic reading of it if my lungs don't fill with fluid first
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TurboFlamingChicken posted:I am literally quarantine in my house so gently caress it I might get this stupid thing and do a dramatic reading of it if my lungs don't fill with fluid first Where you at with this?
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TurboFlamingChicken posted:I am literally quarantine in my house so gently caress it I might get this stupid thing and do a dramatic reading of it if my lungs don't fill with fluid first Careful now; your lungs may fill with fluid just to stop you from inflicting that upon the world. Edit: Gah, didn't realize this thread had been bumped from four days ago.
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Did OP learn to accept criticism yet?
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Hector Delgado posted:Is it a sequel to Bad Moms, Bad Santa, Bad Education, Bad Teacher, Bad Grandpa or one of the other "Bad" movies? I actually got the idea from the movie Bad Lieutenant. I just didn't know what to call it and I wanted a simple title.
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Zippy the Bummer posted:i completely forgot that this was supposed to be the purpose of the thread. You didn't even read it.
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EorayMel posted:When/If OP returns how about we show him a much better self-published book that blows his out of the water in comparison? It's just some esoteric bible.
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Sailor Cat posted:Lol. Anyway, there are tons of books written about being an angsty, misunderstood teenager/young adult that are just as authentic as yours, but are better-written. You can revise or rewrite your book and keep it authentic, it's not a betrayal to yourself or or your work. "To Kill a Mockingbird" started out as a entirely different novel, after all. It's definitely not perfect and could be written in a more "professional" way, but I didn't want to write it like that. It's all a soliloquy and I wanted it to be solely from the protagonist's perspective.
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esoteric bible > sophomoric bile 
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Post an excerpt that you're proud of, or at least okay with.
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Did you come back because you heard Burt Sexual is no longer a mod?
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quote:It's about a disillusioned teenage boy who is a suicidal drug addict with a family that couldn't care less about his existence.
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wesflarger posted:It's definitely not perfect and could be written in a more "professional" way, but I didn't want to write it like that. It's all a soliloquy and I wanted it to be solely from the protagonist's perspective. Some might say it could be written a lot of ways, OP. "Better", for example.
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wesflarger posted:It's definitely not perfect and could be written in a more "professional" way, but I didn't want to write it like that. It's all a soliloquy and I wanted it to be solely from the protagonist's perspective. That has nothing to do with the revision process. you dumb
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anatomi posted:Post an excerpt that you're proud of, or at least okay with.
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hey guys what's going on in here
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quote:It's about a disillusioned teenage boy who is a suicidal drug addict with a family that couldn't care less about his existence. Sartana posted:Can someone who knows a lot about english and language and poo poo explain structurally why I can tell this guy is a bad writer based on this sentence alone The application of the word "disillusioned" tells us that the writer might well lack healthy distance and detachment from the point of view of the immature suicidal drug addict protagonist (himself as a youth). In fact addicts, the suicidal and the immature are usually under the spell of many resentful illusions (and have many self-centred delusions). Self-published unedited unworkshopped autobiographical and semi-autobiographical works frequently do lack a healthy detachment.This is often one of the reasons why the authors of such works couldn't sell to a publisher. "A family that couldn't care less about his existence", the author writes. Yet his parents clothed, fed and housed him, and presumably also gave him enough pocket money for him to afford the drugs he craved, in spite of him being, from the sounds of it, an ungrateful little poo poo who would later self publish a probably slanderous ebook in a vain attempt to "get even" with them. All this screams "bad writer" from the page... mainly from the page of this thread, as few are likely to read the book in its current form, in spite of, or more correctly because of the ego-based self-promotion here. BigBadSteve fucked around with this message at 00:39 on Jul 2, 2020 |
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