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quote:Decades ago, the end of the Last War bathed the world in nuclear fire. Now, in 2151, the world depends on their own will and that of the Outcasts, intrepid explorers who brave the Wastes and Exclusion Zones in search of Old World treasure and tech. shorter edit posted:Decades ago, the Last War bathed the world in nuclear fire. Now, in 2151, the world depends upon the Outcasts, intrepid explorers who brave the Wastes in search of Old World treasure and technology. D34THROW posted:I suppose I was trying to insert too much of the prologue into the blurb.
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Sure, but you don't want to throw out too many Terms in the preamble. That's just a good way to get peoples eyes to glaze over and skip the story. Hook them in with the preamble and introduce other elements of the story later. You also have 3 temporal references in the blurb, and no mention of the main character's name. It makes the new blurb sound like a setting reference rather than a story. Cut 2 of the temporal references and add the character name to provide some reference to the story. quote:The end of the Last War bathed the world in nuclear fire. In 2151, <Character name> seeks to join the Outcasts, intrepid explorers that search through the ruins of the Old World in search of lost technology. This cuts down on terminology that might be unfamiliar to the reader, introduces the reader to main character and gives them a basic motivation and provides context to the one unfamiliar term that cannot be gleaned from context.
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Nov 17, 2021 17:27
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90s Cringe Rock posted:god loving drat it pirate Just finished reading; I can't think of what this is referring to. Was a cool chapter overall although Niers having a no-kill skill seemed a bit too narratively convenient so that we didn't have to worry about anyone becoming a killer.
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Nov 17, 2021 17:40
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Argue posted:Just finished reading; I can't think of what this is referring to. Was a cool chapter overall although Niers having a no-kill skill seemed a bit too narratively convenient so that we didn't have to worry about anyone becoming a killer. berenzen posted:Sure, but you don't want to throw out too many Terms in the preamble. That's just a good way to get peoples eyes to glaze over and skip the story. Hook them in with the preamble and introduce other elements of the story later.
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Nov 17, 2021 18:32
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Mother of Learning Arc 1 out on Dec 1 on Kindle: https://www.reddit.com/r/ProgressionFantasy/comments/qw0s9e/mother_of_learning_arc_1_cover_reveal_and_kindle/
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Nov 17, 2021 19:13
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Selkie Myth posted:Related - I'm getting a bit roasted for my MC's ethics not being exactly the same as what people consider to be "Typically good". Like, Elaine is pretty darn close to pure-driven snow in the ethics department, at least as far as litRPG protags go, but I've been getting quite a lot of flak for Elaine on Patreon going "Hey, body snatchers are people as well, and I shouldn't wholesale massacre them when I see them. It wasn't their fault for being born that way. Now, I don't like them, and if I can find an excuse I'll use it, but I won't wantonly massacre them." probably just people refighting the animorphs debates about yeerks tbh. i wouldn't worry about it, it's a sign of good moral ambiguity imo
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Nov 17, 2021 20:06
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Selkie Myth posted:Related - I'm getting a bit roasted for my MC's ethics not being exactly the same as what people consider to be "Typically good". Like, Elaine is pretty darn close to pure-driven snow in the ethics department, at least as far as litRPG protags go, but I've been getting quite a lot of flak for Elaine on Patreon going "Hey, body snatchers are people as well, and I shouldn't wholesale massacre them when I see them. It wasn't their fault for being born that way. Now, I don't like them, and if I can find an excuse I'll use it, but I won't wantonly massacre them." One of my currently-followed MCs is literally bloodthirsty - it's a character trait and she has to roll to do anything short of straight up overkill. The other has a bad temper and barely succeeded a self-control check to avoid firing on a group of six people who were of a certain faction, simply because he hates that faction with a passion. No character is perfect. Not one. I see an unambiguous character and I roll my eyes so loving hard. Another character of mine in another project was an alcoholic with an anger problem and a hosed-up sister who fought in an interdimensional underground fight club to compensate for his own self-hatred. Nobody is loving perfect.
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Nov 17, 2021 20:52
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Nettle Soup posted:RoyalRoad Writeathon 25k+ winners are out. Man that's a lot of LitRPGs/Isekais. Anyways, I started reading Tori Transmigated and Memoirs of Your Local Small-time Villainess. Both follow the same concept of a woman waking up to find that she's now the villainess of a story. In the former, she a character in an Otome story, in the latter she's an NPC from an open-world fantasy RPG. The story is pretty much the standard; both MCs want to avoid their bad ending. The things is that the story is trying to assert itself. In Tori, this is by having the "good" characters act as if the MC still evil, regardless of what she does. In Memoirs the original character's personality keeps trying to influence the MC. I'm not sure how long either story can keep going before it starts to get tiring, but in any case, both were fairly fun to read.
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Nov 17, 2021 22:15
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@Kamikaze - don't think I didn't notice what you did during the latest chapter Rob / Diplomacy / Elf / Fiends conversation Namely that it's very explicitly spelled out a few times that it's not Rob speaking at all.
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Nov 18, 2021 09:37
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tithin posted:@Kamikaze - don't think I didn't notice what you did during the latest chapter Rob / Diplomacy / Elf / Fiends conversation No comment.
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Nov 18, 2021 11:02
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This Used To Be About Repeatedly Murdering Lola Great Job Mizuki “What has Alfric gotten the most excited about, in his time here?” asked Verity. “Um,” said Mizuki. “That stupid wardrobe?”
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Nov 18, 2021 20:01
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TUTBAD 45: holy gently caress lola is even worse of an abuser than i thought! her mind seems to have been irrevocably warped by her ability and she seems wholly unable to comprehend that her actions have consequences. fuuuuuuck. she gives off such incredible abuser vibes it makes my skin crawl A big flaming stink fucked around with this message at 20:27 on Nov 18, 2021 |
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Nov 18, 2021 20:07
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90s Cringe Rock posted:This Used To Be About Repeatedly Murdering Lola Great Job Mizuki Lola's certainly made for a darker turn in this story. She's gross, but I'm very interested in what tactics she's intending on employing here, it seems like just about any manipulation would just cause the party to tighten further in defense. The party's getting along well, the only big secret left is Verity being God touched or whatever it's called, but that's not the kind of reveal that's gonna piss anyone off. Edit: next chapter is called Both Sides, eager to see if this means a Lola PoV chapter, maybe of an undone day? Cicero fucked around with this message at 21:43 on Nov 18, 2021 |
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Nov 18, 2021 21:40
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Cicero posted:
my thinking is that lola is completely flailing just trying to exhaust every single dialogue tree possible to get alfric back on her good side again. The big obstacle in her way, though, is alfric honestly gets lola and what makes her tick, and lola absolutely does not get alfric. subtext is pretty clear that she truly believes alfric is just like she is deep down inside and he just needs a push to really cut loose. which is basically the exact opposite of everything alfric is like. what really struck me is taht alfric didnt even seem angry, he just seemed fatigued and exhausted. there's absolutely no going back to how things where before lola destroyed his party, and for once in lola's life, this isn't something she can undo. i don't think she's gonna have an easy time accepting that
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Nov 19, 2021 01:55
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Just stayed up far to late reading Katalepsis, just had to read on until Heather gets home ... and then suddenly the next button is missing ! What ! Why ? How can I have reached the (current) end already ? What a marvelous story, although I'm sometimes wondering, if things get to emotional and intimate, if I should be reading this at all. Is it a good or a bad sign if a book makes you feel like a dirty old man ? Guess after the Wandering Inn I got one more thing to support on Patreon. Don't think I can add any other unfinished web novels though, even if there's good stuff out there. The Wandering Inn broke me for a month, I couldn't read any other books anymore after reaching the end. To many characters with unfished stories in my head at once.
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Nov 19, 2021 09:48
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Started reading The Last Orellen, it's a solid classic fantasy story that shot up the best rated and rising stars list. The best compliment I can give it is that it doesn't seem like a story that belongs on RR, no numbers, no blue boxes no isekai. Just solid writing and hooked me quickly, only 21 chapters so far though so I burned through them quick and was left wanting more.
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Nov 19, 2021 10:29
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tithin posted:@Kamikaze - don't think I didn't notice what you did during the latest chapter Rob / Diplomacy / Elf / Fiends conversation I also noticed this. I'm curious where the Diplomacy stuff is heading. As I think I mentioned in an earlier post on the topic there hasn't really been any indication so far that Diplomacy would ever not act in a way that is respectful of Rob's autonomy, but maybe it's heading somewhere like the distinction between Rob and Diplomacy blurring.
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Nov 19, 2021 21:53
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Kitty Cat Kill Sat 17: more like Sabo Cat Kill Hierarchy, am i right????
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Nov 20, 2021 05:18
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MonikaTSarn posted:Just stayed up far to late reading Katalepsis, just had to read on until Heather gets home ... and then suddenly the next button is missing ! What ! Why ? How can I have reached the (current) end already ? Hey, thank you! Always a delight to hear about readers enjoying the story so far. I guess you're probably one of the couple of new patrons I got this weekend? Thanks! As for feeling like a "dirty old man", don't worry, this story is for everyone who enjoys it; I made a commitment that there's never going to be any sex 'on-screen'. There's a time and a place for erotica and Katalepsis is not that place.
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Nov 21, 2021 19:40
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I finally finished my two month long web serial. And of course I immediately have an idea for the next volume of what was intended to be a standalone. Anyway it's short, it's silly, it's fish on a stick. https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/46916/fish-on-a-stick-a-redmist-story
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Nov 21, 2021 20:39
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Halfway through TWI's latest public chapter... The antinium truly are the ultimate jobbers to a hero party. Their veteran soldier is a pallett swap.
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Nov 21, 2021 21:48
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White Chocolate posted:I finally finished my two month long web serial. And of course I immediately have an idea for the next volume of what was intended to be a standalone. Anyway it's short, it's silly, it's fish on a stick. Congrats on finishing a story! Not many authors end up doing that.
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Nov 23, 2021 03:36
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Hungry posted:Hey, thank you! Always a delight to hear about readers enjoying the story so far. I guess you're probably one of the couple of new patrons I got this weekend? Thanks! Yeah, I just subscribed. Totally worth it. As for the other comment, it's not about the non-existing sex - it's that sometimes when mental problems and emotions are described well, it becomes very real - and then I feel like I'm spying on somebody very vulnerable by reading their private journal or so. I forgot exactly when I got to this point, think it was when Raine described her life the second time. It's really well done here, but I've read books ( It's corona-forever-time, Ive read far to much weird poo poo in the last two years) where I felt somehow wrong and exploitative, like a series of werewolf romance novels where each woman had a more hosed up childhood then the next and it all got solved through the power of true mating.
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Nov 24, 2021 14:33
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Is it presumptuous to start a wiki prior to even launching? I mean, I realistically need a better place than categories on WordPress to keep my poo poo straight, and I sometimes would rather write articles than story content.
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Nov 24, 2021 16:52
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The only thing I'd be worried about is spoilers, but so long as it's organized and helpful I don't think anyone would complain.
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Nov 24, 2021 19:05
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I'd recommend keeping a story bible or a local wiki if you want to keep stuff straight. That way you can keep stuff straight and have spoilers riddled throughout your work without spoiling it for the outside world.
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Nov 24, 2021 19:59
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Scrivener or Evernote or similar are pretty much mandatory if you get past a year, but they aren't required to start the process.
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Nov 24, 2021 23:27
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I've been using Google docs to keep my notes. The main failure point so far is being too lazy to add stuff to the notes when I introduce a minor character and then having to review my earlier chapters when I want to bring them back for another scene.
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Nov 25, 2021 04:44
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TUTBAD 48: This is a very Alexander Wales chapter, inevitable that he was gonna have one about the ethics of murdering seemingly-sapient creatures in the dungeon so you can take their stuff.
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Nov 25, 2021 18:44
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Just randomly trying on various random magic items seems like a good way to get killed. Why can't they wait until they get outside the dungeon to get a cleric to test them?
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Nov 25, 2021 21:22
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Peachfart posted:Just randomly trying on various random magic items seems like a good way to get killed. Why can't they wait until they get outside the dungeon to get a cleric to test them? Clerics are expensive and sometimes the items bind themselves to whoever is carrying it, so it's best to test them out in dungeon so you don't end up giving your wizard a belt of giant's strength or whatever. Also he's kinda kill proof.
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Nov 25, 2021 21:29
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Peachfart posted:Just randomly trying on various random magic items seems like a good way to get killed. Why can't they wait until they get outside the dungeon to get a cleric to test them? Alfric suggests doing that almost every time the topic comes up. Wrong Voter Hanna persistently leads the charge on boldly exploring new depths of self-harm instead. (I really don't like Hanna). Lone Goat posted:Clerics are expensive and sometimes the items bind themselves to whoever is carrying it, so it's best to test them out in dungeon so you don't end up giving your wizard a belt of giant's strength or whatever. Sometimes items bind themselves to someone in the party at random, regardless of who is carrying it. Although they do seem to bind to whoever is carrying them slightly more often. The effect, if real, of carrying an item, is not large. He's only kinda kill proof. Chrononauts have two very obvious weaknesses in their immortality, and they can be chained for a guaranteed kill. Chrononauts have a limit on how often they can reset the day. Chrononauts can't reset a day if they're unconscious. So for a guaranteed kill: knock a chrononaut out; wait until after their reset time; and then kill them. They'll auto-reset the day each time you kill them, but only back to still being helpless. Just keep killing them until the day stops resetting. Alfric has shared both weaknesses. I think why he hasn't spelled out the combination is fairly obvious, but he, and other responsible chrononauts, are quick to remind their allies that they aren't actually immortal.
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Nov 25, 2021 22:34
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MonikaTSarn posted:Yeah, I just subscribed. Totally worth it. While I probably can't say anything to help with the feeling you've described (but I will tell you not to worry), the bolded part is both absolutely incredible and also something I've specifically tried to avoid in my own work!
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Nov 25, 2021 22:46
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Bit of an odd question, but I've been thinking about this for awhile; authors, how would you feel if someone sent you a book cover fanart? One of the series I'm following on RR wrapped up its first arc, and I decided to make some covers for fun. They ended up pretty nice IMO, and I thought about sending it to the author, but it seems a bit like I'd be overreaching. The series' author doesn't really interact with readers much, so I'm not sure how they'd take it.
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Nov 29, 2021 19:23
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Narmi posted:Bit of an odd question, but I've been thinking about this for awhile; authors, how would you feel if someone sent you a book cover fanart? One of the series I'm following on RR wrapped up its first arc, and I decided to make some covers for fun. They ended up pretty nice IMO, and I thought about sending it to the author, but it seems a bit like I'd be overreaching. The series' author doesn't really interact with readers much, so I'm not sure how they'd take it. I would be incredibly flattered and would never consider this overreaching, readers have sent me all sorts of things. But then again I interact with readers a lot and there's a already a lot of fanart of Katalepsis. Is this story the only thing the author has written? If so, they might not have experienced this before, just might not have a way of processing it or something. I'd still reach out though, it's really gratifying as a writer to know your work inspired somebody else to be creative.
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Nov 29, 2021 19:54
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Seems like an ordinary enough thing to me, and people have done cover-fanart for other online books I read. The fanart shoutout at the end of the most recent Katalepsis was also pretty neat, reminded me to check out the page and see the newer pieces. Hadn't been there for a while.
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Nov 29, 2021 19:56
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Narmi posted:Bit of an odd question, but I've been thinking about this for awhile; authors, how would you feel if someone sent you a book cover fanart? One of the series I'm following on RR wrapped up its first arc, and I decided to make some covers for fun. They ended up pretty nice IMO, and I thought about sending it to the author, but it seems a bit like I'd be overreaching. The series' author doesn't really interact with readers much, so I'm not sure how they'd take it. I would be flattered as well, probably trying to give free Patreon access for life or something like that. Especially if I got to use it for future cover art. I was really loving dumb picking Bumfuck, Utah as my setting. Pretty much everything is along one of the major US or UT highways, which makes it really hard to pick an out-of-the-way town as a sort of Vaes Dothrak for the bandit faction. That moment when you didn't even realize you were making tiny gunslinging khalasars until you were committed to the idea. 
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Nov 29, 2021 19:57
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Narmi posted:Bit of an odd question, but I've been thinking about this for awhile; authors, how would you feel if someone sent you a book cover fanart? One of the series I'm following on RR wrapped up its first arc, and I decided to make some covers for fun. They ended up pretty nice IMO, and I thought about sending it to the author, but it seems a bit like I'd be overreaching. The series' author doesn't really interact with readers much, so I'm not sure how they'd take it. I would put it in a planned post and credit the person who made it. Sounds awesome.
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Nov 29, 2021 20:51
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Narmi posted:Bit of an odd question, but I've been thinking about this for awhile; authors, how would you feel if someone sent you a book cover fanart? One of the series I'm following on RR wrapped up its first arc, and I decided to make some covers for fun. They ended up pretty nice IMO, and I thought about sending it to the author, but it seems a bit like I'd be overreaching. The series' author doesn't really interact with readers much, so I'm not sure how they'd take it. I'd love it! I'd think of it as "fanart" though, not "Potential cover art". Then again, I spend a looooooooooot on my covers, so I'm in a weird spot
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Narmi posted:Bit of an odd question, but I've been thinking about this for awhile; authors, how would you feel if someone sent you a book cover fanart? One of the series I'm following on RR wrapped up its first arc, and I decided to make some covers for fun. They ended up pretty nice IMO, and I thought about sending it to the author, but it seems a bit like I'd be overreaching. The series' author doesn't really interact with readers much, so I'm not sure how they'd take it. I'm not a paranoid lawyer but wouldn't the fact that they didn't sign over the rights to that image like in a professionally commissioned art contract be an issue?
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